To My Dearest Scarlet

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Comment posted by SkywardSword deleted Aug 30th, 2018

WhispersInTheDark

WhispersInTheDark #2 · Aug 30th, 2018 · 1 · ·

It didn't come across as a suicide note, for he wrote: "I'll be home soon." Other than that, and some grammatical errors ( 'they're' instead of 'their', 'you're' instead of 'your' ) it was a decent read.

SkywardSword

SkywardSword #3 · Aug 30th, 2018 · · ·

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Thanks for the feedback! I'm honestly really proud of this one and tried to make the note as subtle as possible.

I'm glad you enjoyed the read!

Thatguywiththeface

Thatguywiththeface #4 · Aug 30th, 2018 · 2 · ·

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He never said what condition he'd be coming home in, nor did he specify what location he was referring to, he could have been referring to the afterlife. I connected the dots when he said he'd go for a walk later that night, after remembering him mentioning that the minefield warning signs were really hard to see at night.

SkywardSword

SkywardSword #5 · Aug 30th, 2018 · · ·

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EverfreePony

EverfreePony #6 · Aug 30th, 2019 · 1 · ·

Very nice dark read with very very subtle hints of suicide—but given what Mint Cutter has been through, his choice is more than understandable. The flow was nice and dynamic, interrupted by an error here and there, but in overall, it was still a fine story.

SkywardSword

SkywardSword #7 · Aug 30th, 2019 · 1 · ·

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Glad you enjoyed the read, me and my editor will take one more look through the story to try and weed out the last of the errors.

EverfreePony

EverfreePony #8 · Aug 30th, 2019 · 1 · ·

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You're welcome Let me know if you or your editor need help with combing for the errors (or what I and the 16th edition of The Chicago Manual of Style consider to be errors anyway.)