On one visit in Canterlot Spike asks if he could tag along with Rarity, but later she sees him kissing Blueblood!! What in Equestria is happening!?
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Well… that umm exists 😐
Good for what it was I guess👍
This was painful.
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9105309
Look I know it's bad okay but I plan for my stories to get better
Spike has gay.
9105402
Yup the first is helps you get into
'The Swing of Things' as it is…
The really good stuff should show up in your next work or maybe the 3rd. Keep on writing if ya' like making the stories
...I have no words. It was so random. I don't even know what to think of it.
9105391
Yo, could you say what was the bad like was it the story, the shipping or what. With that information I can then improve the quality of later fimfics
What the fuck is this?
HEY STOP!!!
What, why? I just don't get it. Every time I come on this site I catch you fuckers reading this sick shit. This is SICKENING!
9106277
Your execution is bad. Pacing is off, the plot is random. There's no setup, you don't describe your environment, and the characters are mean-spirited for no discernable reason. Twilight's reaction to Thorax and the possibility of him being a pedo is off. She's nowhere NEAR defensive enough, and a reaction to that wouldn't be "isn't he an adult" it would be "I'm calling the fucking cops"
9106277
Dialogue was terrible and the pacing sucked. This should have been a good 3-4 times longer.
WHAT?! I WANTED TO SEE WHAT WOULD HAPPEN NEXT!!!! I am very disappointed.
9110092
What do you mean next?
9110168
I wanted to see if there would be some form of ceremony or not. But seriously though, this story was poorly paced along with too many random moments.
9110175
Their wouldn't be a ceremony because during the fic spike said this all happened 6 months ago. Marriages and stuff like that don't happen that fast
9110183
That's true.
9110184
Yeah and I also got a lot of beef about the pacing but I'll be sure to fix that in my next fic
9110245
Great. Also, make sure it's more consistent and less random.
9110183
Sometimes they do. It's a very bad idea to get married that fast, but it happens. And that's why the divorce rate is sky-high.
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