Twilight and her friends have to find the elements to defeat discord and save ponyvile form eternal chaos and destruction by restoring friendship and harmony to her friends and the town.
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Okay, first off, edit the story. A lot of grammar issues!
ok first both of yall need to shut the hell up and there is no grammar issues so smd bitches
986334 ok so let me put this in a nicer way again sence i dont see alot of positive feedback for you
this is an improvement for you last story main in terms of spaceing but as ryan and phat both said there are grammer issues so i cant not stress enough on proofreading because like i said before grammer nazi's will find you and before you know it your getting tons of hate so make sure look of grammer error before you post a story or better yet find someone who it will to look through your story not only will they help you with gammer error but its also a good way to get a first opinion before posting
second dont restate info your reader alread know (f.y.i Ii have made this mistake before) as phat has already mentioned your summerizing the first and second episodes of season 2 of which eveyone on this site alread seen so making a chapter that states what people already know can get boring really quickly when making a story you want what you write to something that grabs your reader use your imagination but most of all have fun with it
i hope that this advice your become a better writer and convinces you to keep tring in future attemtps at a story i will be watching and remember this suppost to be fun
989195nigga fuck u
989375 and also try not to let hate get to you
989372 well thanks but i thing im going do delete this account cause people are pissing me off to the point were i want to kill them
989381 i try but it just pisses me off and i need some to help me
989417 well if you want i could do what i can to help and i might know some people who could help as well if ya like
989451 sounds kool
989461 k so what would you need me to do or what do you need help with
i need help with the grammar checks and punctuation corrections and stuff like that
989482ok i can help to a degree but im not the best at grammer myself to be honest but im more than willing to try
The spacing is great compared to your last story. I liked the little detail you added about Twilight going through a hundred books; she's the type of pony who would go through her whole library to find out something