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A. Tuesday


"Thirty-eight days. It’s been thirty-eight days since I was exiled out here, out into the desert of Celestia-knows-where, originally miles from the nearest town... the idea that I could get her home and leave unscathed was ridiculous. Equestria wanted her back, without a doubt, but what they also wanted was me – they wanted me in a prison cell, or a dungeon, or in a torture chamber, or, most likely, in a noose."

"I had to try, though. Wasn’t that enough?"

Sequel to not-as-well-written "The Fire and the Flutter" (http://www.fimfiction.net/story/13386/The-Fire-and-The-Flutter)

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 4 )

"The congregation simultaneously turned there heads"
their heads

This story is good. The good thing is, you didn't expo-dump all information about Firestarter - but I hope you will slowly release that info over the upcoming chapters.
Descriptions are clear and imagery used is great as well. I notice there isn't a lot of smell description, though - the smell of burning flesh, the smell of the apartment...


Very nice. I look forward to more of this story.:pinkiehappy:

This is high-quality. You've a very striking syntax and style. The short choppy sentences punctuate and dramatize the situation well. I'm really looking forward to more.

I will say that I am a bit confused at this point by some of the events that happened without any kind of commentary from Firestarter. (Ironic name choice, too, I note.) What's the deal with Fluttershy and Firestarter? Are they together or something? Or are they in a hospital? I agree with N00813 that your lack of information for the most part is a good thing, but maybe a little giveback would help!

Can't wait for the next chapter though! Fav'd.

EDIT: Oh, wow, I should learn to read better. It's a sequel, Mane. Well, anyway, sometimes it's good to recap information in sequels. Excuse me while I go read the first fic.

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