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Need most! Nuff said. But really tho, I'm interested, and I only recently got into prototype. I love it when the actual superpower of something is evolution and adaptation. Tis epic! As one might say.
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You don't even know how happy you made me with this comment. Thank you very much :D
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My pleasure. I myself am having troubles with my writing due to a lack of being able to put effort into things:P But the comments on my story are what motivated me so to write more, so I'm glad to help :D. Just remember, if all else fails, all you have to do is find someone who's happy and consume them. By process of reasoning(aka bad logic) this instantly makes you happy too!
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I thank you for spotting my error, ad I said english is not my First language so thanks for the help. The error sul bè fixed as Soon as possible
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Oh well I'll remember that then hahahaha
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Remember he didn't want them to found out how powerful he is, and a not mad Celestia is a Celestia Who leaves Canterlot for business ;)
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YESSSSSSS! WE MUST...CONSUME......EVERYTHING! BECOME EVERYTHING! DEVOUR EVERYTHING! And then save the world. By eating that too. Totally.
Ladies
start
strength
with
let
shr too
Remind me
that was worded really weirdly I say it like”And as soon as I said that I swore
its
erase the “at”
faster
slam into the ground
erase the “will”
it’s
I don't know what “incamminated” was supposed to be
shapeshift
erase the “at”
the
Rainbow
mutated
resolutely
hesitation
for some reason I expected spike with an airhorn to be hiding behind one of the piles.
his lower
to
instantaneous
extremely
was
erase the when
is
control
manageable
from doing
immediately
was
when’d
I'm not gonna lie I have no idea what's going on with the first bit.
walls
existence
composed
one per floor
find
mentioning
starte started
immediately
immediately
the blink of an eye
into
and
situations
its eyes
completely
destroying
flew
caught it
see
I don't know what “proietting” means but I think throwing would work there.
fell
ground
erase the “again”
threw
use its instead of it’s when it is doesn't sound right
basilisk also you say “again” far to much.
tackled it to
erase the “had” and put “has” in front of Celestia
erase the she and add an s at the end of pony
why can't I
cheeks
was
enormous
dragon scales are magic resistant so I do I don't know how his armor will hold up but if hr finds a way to redarect some of the magic he might have a chance.
freedom do we have
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for some reason I didn't get a notification about this and instead of my name it's just the comment number.
If you think about it the journal of the two pony sisters claims that celestia uses the sun like a magic battery so if he can find enough magical power he could move the sun on his own and sever her connection for a few moments, I mean she'd have to reconnect to the sun to use its power which would take a few seconds but if he keeps the pressure up during a fight he could stop her from recharging and get the upper hand.
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Thanks for your hard work with spotting my errors, incamminated was my italian blood's attempt to say: we then started walking.
The upsye is and esclamation like oops don't worry.
Thanks again for you work
Oh shit......SUNSET NOOOOO!!!!!
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You know he could probably control it to where sunset has her own free will still
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I'm Sorry but as I said english isn't my First language and because of that, Sorry but I don't understand what you Just said Sorry
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what is your first language?
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Italian :D Yep I'm from Italy se vuoi posso parlarti in italiano ma non so quanto capisci ;)
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ho trovato un traduttore spero che questo aiuti
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La prima domanda era: "Sai che probabilmente potresti controllarlo così Sunset ha ancora il libero arbitrio"
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Sunset has been freed from his mind control, so don't worry
the only problem for me on this fic is that the story is becoming less of an MLP fic, coz if you try to change the MLP names to other generic names this will wont turn out as an MLP fic.....
you need to add more MLP elements here (not the elements of harmony) (no pun intended as well) i dunno how coz im no writer myself.....
besides grammar and spelling that would be the only thing i would like to address on this fic!
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Yeah I know the first chapters are to assest the situation, later in the story you will see more MLP item structures and characters. For the grammar error, just know that english is not my first language BUT thank you for your advice and comment
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Assist not assest
There is always auto correct
" And that ass... " What? Why I thought that? I don't have the time for it! " I need to think straight, I need to start preparing myself for the rebellion, not think about a powerful...intelligent, beautiful mare...Fuck. No I can't! Philp you are immortal now, she is not, you will outlive her you can't! " 'sigh'
Got me there
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S O L
Sol
Sole? Sun?
Hilariously fast-paced and nearly nonsensical in terms of romance and certain paragraphs of grammar. Love it.
He can literally alter his emotions to prevent this from happening.
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I know XD the [OLD] chapters are full of errors and other incredibly cringy things, that is my own fault because I wasn't a seasoned author back there so don't worry too much about them they are mostly harmless.