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Hmm
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Hmm to you too sir, interested in our assortment of chapters?
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Indeed I am
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I'm very pleased to know that support me with a like if you like the story :D
And feel free to offer suggestions and/or tips
never before have I saw a mare
than
hooves
I get what you were going for but I’d suggest she shift back the tail and/or ears when she's around ponies.
how would she know what feet are, if anything I’d expect her to call them paws.
shook
erase the “again”
flying
lavender
enormous
heavily
walls
withstand a thaumic
it's
erase the “of”
in diameter
capable
erase the first and
weighed
Impotent
Colonel
his
Colonel
instant
need
i just never before ate something raw before, Or alive, it wasn't bad you know?
it’s
that’s making
shook
let
meditating I suppose
incredulous
control
made
liches
communicate
the users of the death path are ageless,
paralyzing
gaine
I both agree with this and don't, I've always seen the virus as being very random and personalized, so if two infected absorb the same DNA they might gain similar powers but not identical ones like mercers Thermal Vision verses Heller's Hunting ability.Though it should be noted that infected can steal each others special traits by absorbing them like heller did with the biobombers ability. I’ll come up with a list of specific traits or abilities, I think the main six should have later.
“grew” instead of “was”
of
channelled
“as” instead of “that”
Foot of the Mountain
walls
descent
erase the “was”
with them being
but Chrysalis beated me to it
these people
Why’d
volunteered
first to change were my eyes,
experiments
expecting
them
don’t
you're
expect
is this really
“give” instead of “make”
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I think I should start to pay you. You are too useful thanks
Also all fixed, I added some more sentences to the story, and the fortress was imposing not impotent
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don't thank me citizen thank OCD.
also
here's my list of possible powers for the main six.
Fluttershy- animal control (less like mind control and more like she’d release calming pheromones near animals that make them more peaceful.), animal communication, and you already gave her the stair so maybe give her a healing ability without the need to transform the person being healed.
Applejack- she should definitely have more strength than usual(even for the evolved), possible plant manipulation, and maybe she could have a pack leader style ability except she'd have one permanent companion, named Winona.
Rarity- I think she should have some type of organic crystal ability, possibly to make armor and or arrows from gems created from her body’s carbon that mixed with a modified tendril arm could make a pretty good bow and arrow. A classy weapon for a classy fighter. Alternatively she could just incorporate already existing gems into her body to both make herself tougher and add a certain flair to her self.
Rainbow Dash- Definitely something flight based, I’d go with making her wings/feathers extendable and have each feather be strong enough to act like a shield or cutting weapon if she decides to start launching individual feathers.
Pinky Pie- is pinky pie, I can't think of anything because she can already do anything without blacklight .
Twilight- She’ll almost certainly have something related to knowledge gathering, like the ability to extract details from people just by shaking their hand without consuming them like Rogue from the X men or possibly she’d be able to absorb magic from attacks and redirect it.
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Thanks for your advice I already wanted to give Fluttershy animal control and paralyzing gaze, I already thought to give AJ extreme strength and a better armor, raimbow dash will be the best of the best on the air of course and for rarity, pinkie and twilight I won't say anything, it's a surprise~~~
Oh my God Celestia is here kill her kill her!
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Yesssssss~~~~
and here i was thinking little cadence may have been the embodiment of amore's magic and that curse could end with their reunion. my idea went right out the window rather quick. the romance seemed rushed, not even two days and the express their love. felt unnatural. something to keep in mind on any later stories you make. a slower burn may make it more natural feel. or i think so anyway. regardless i'm still keeping this tracked a am enjoying it.
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Thanks for your suggestion.
The romance is a bit rushed because
1) my virus make the people infected more sociable this in order to create a stable society with other evolved.
2) I hate when the romance thing get dragged out for 55 thousands episodes, and this is what I would have done. And Sunset is my favourite character so yeah I did it XD
In all seriousness though I needed the characters to focus on the more pressing thing in Equestria.
I will take your advice in heart when I'll start my next story (another crossover, I won't tell you with who but you will like it ;) )
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Thanks man
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i accept your reasoning, it is sound a fair and besides my its just my preference anyway and i'm not the one writing this. :P
CHRYSIIIIII!! NOOOOOOOOOOO! This actually made me cry damn it! and I loved every second of it.
Hi bill!
Dude, seriously go through these and re-write and edit them okay?
Okay. Good. Nice. Awesome. Great. Swell. Requiring praise. Amazing. Cool. Lit. Bahdum tsssssss.
"Oh I know lots of things." My voice got down of two octave. "Lots of things." I returned my voice to normal and continued. "Anyway what do you want? And how do you know me? Why you call me Hunter?"
You know that's actually some pretty good lore, Chrysi being Amore. Sad as it is.