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Do you have an editor?
8702444
Nope, right now I ask to one of my friends to spot for me errors when he have time
8702455
I would like to edit for you
The ending of this chapter is very heartfelt, very well done :)
8702999
Thank you
8702775
I don't know how to make you my editor, I will think about it nonetheless
8703417
My guess would be to either share it with google docs or email it to me before uploading and don’t worry about my life getting in the way because I don’t have one
8703515
Oh ok. Ehm sorry? For the life you haven't? Anyway yeah you would really help, when you have finished you could also write a little note in the author notes. Just for the heck of it
8703521
So should I just PM you my email and remember I will be editing errors I see not helping you write
8703532
It's fine by me, go ahead.
multitude
established a contact
guess
it’s
Yes I can see her live, (it's still kinda awkward but I don't know how to phrase it better.)
I'm not good enough at using the hive mind.
into
I think soldier is supposed to be pluralized there
means to
I’ll
As per the wishes of your prior queen
shaking
bodies
there
muzzles
into their skulls
horns were
thrashing
to a kneeling position
erase the “then”
losing
thank
all stood up now
I thought he described the blacklight virus to sunset as having the ability to “Evolve” almost anyone as long as one of the evolved was the one doing the infecting.
Do you have any aches, pains
The changeling ran towards me awkwardly, obviously unbalanced by her new feet,
changeling
changing form
changelings
Not one of them is.
I think you were going for “nothing that you didn't before am I right?" but thats not right it would work better as “nothing that weren't used to before”
of a few years
I would be crying out of happiness too
it’s
go back
did you mean at a new place or?
erase the at
dragon scale
Intensely
I
lying
clearing
ordered
transfer went well
handshake
that
are the king
“adveniment” should be “occurrence”
transported
help
thrashing
risk losing you
for me
styled
always
ground
“buboes” are inflamed lymph nodes in the pits and thighs, what you're thinking of are tumors or growths.
I don't know why you put a “u” in inpony, it should be like inhuman witch as no “u”
bashed
audible
trying
were
blood red tentacles
erase the all
“a” instead of “an”
immediately
this paragraph is weird it starts off describing the plane like it wasn't in progress but then it switches to describing it like its happening, my advice is chance it.
We arrived at Ponyville and waited for the night
then we sent
they gave
at its place
do you mean “four semi automatic”?
obviously
And saying that
repeater
was
guns
condensed
“toward” would work better than “forward”
at multiple point and twist themselves
perforate
in
and
cells
ponies
scared
I have no idea what “livids” are
immediately
to them
I’m alone
8704195
I was starting to worry, you are later than usual
Oh and thank for your work
I’m kinda hoping that mercer tries to do something I like to call “flesh sculpting” it's kinda like a slower version of the pack leader ability but it would allow him to create more specialized creachers possibly even some worthey of horror stories to scare anyone from going near the Everfree.
my personal suggestion would be to make something based off of the woodsman from the transcendence AU of gravity falls. images.8tracks.com/cover/i/008/507/603/tumblr_nf92uqBptO1rhmhm9o1_1280-361.png?rect=0,250,1000,1000&q=98&fm=jpg&fit=max
78.media.tumblr.com/a3a6844b4761839bac33d4ef5cb68a22/tumblr_nf6a71kZHX1rhmhm9o1_1280.png
or you could go with the more monstrous version from after henry dies 78.media.tumblr.com/95b717a16d929afb877bdf8a070dcd0a/tumblr_nvscm3RXqN1qiqq72o1_1280.png
http://transcendence-au.tumblr.com/post/130610430028/ordinarydoodles-i-have-a-personal-headcanon
8704224
Sorry I read the story and then fell asleep before making any corrections.
8704225
I already had in mind to create some guardians for the everfree, thank you for your suggestions!
8704195
Yes, but he wasn't good enough at controlling the virus back then and he didn't know about his modified one so he just infected her and hoped for the best.
Nope I meant a new palace like a castle you know?
"Livids" was my Italian blood tacking control of my body. The word I used was bruises but in Italian that is translated with "lividi" I'm sorry if I caused you an heart attack with this one
Did you mean your mother didn't (a contraction of 'did not')?
8760703
No she did as she asked him to look after Derpy.
Weird ass authors note.
8841741
Generating surprised greeting: Greetings unit *Lovecraftia*!
did you meen Yes your highness