It has been 5 years since Sweetie Belle, Apple Bloom, and Scootaloo went missing. A pony by the name of Pin Point will do what others could not. Find the CMC and bring them home. This is history.
Chapters (6)
crank1116
Joined 4th Sep, 2017 ·
Offline
Sequels1
-
crank1116 · 7.1k words · 241 views
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- deadpansnarker · 2.7k words · 64 4 · 3.8k views
- GJT_Productions · 10k words · 17 0 · 543 views
- DanishDash · 49k words · 95 4 · 1.2k views
- PonyThunder · 19k words · 48 0 · 1.5k views
- AmberWings · 5.8k words · 897 33 · 22k views
- River Road · 3.9k words · 96 0 · 3.7k views
- GeodesicDragon · 2.3k words · 130 2 · 4.1k views
- Shadowlord · 3.9k words · 95 1 · 6.4k views
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Stats
Page generated in 0.096 seconds
Total duration
1,047 users online
2,209,128 hits today, 2,280,440 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
If this story is not anthro I suggest you change the story pic, if it is anthro add the tag
This doesn't have any relations with Theponycaptorproject and his story does it?
8643740
its not anthro just went with the first pick i had in my gallery with the CMC
8643772
yes it does. that's where i got the inspireation
8643830
Right.
Read mine then
8643830
I think you did read mine cause in mine I killed Higj Rise as well
You should also link to the original story if you're piggybacking off it, it's just a basic courtesy to the original author.
8656617
Thank you for that I shall. All this is still a little new to me
You should do a story around your career: Truck driving!!
8656630
Dude.
I promise I don't want to sound negative; I'm trying to give my take on this to help you as a new writer. And so far I've only read the first chapter.
I bet it probably felt good to write it though.
There's just not much to read if he just appears on the doorstep, talks a bit, and everyone is intimidated into letting him leave with her as short and sweet as that.
* * *
Honestly the fight went a bit too well in his favor to not be a quick fix, though it's good to see this chapter didn't repeat the first two chapters.
I'm just starting out. This is my first attempt of actually publishing something and I feel I'll get better the more I write. I come up with ideas all the time I just haven't put them to my tablet yet. Maybe if I had someone to help me or someone I could run ideas through I can make a better story. However the only other person I can never tell my stories to is my son. So I'm doing what I can and still driving an 18-wheeler down the highway.
To quote Wikipedia:
Basically the audience wants to be a part of the experience. Rather than to hear Pin Point say what happened they want to go through it with him - sort of like we did when he went into the bar to rescue Scootaloo. As the protagonist that the story follows we want to actually see, hear, smell, and feel Pin Point doing the things he does; not hear him explain them. That's what gives us a connection to the characters we read about.
I noticed every chapter was better than the previous one. Like you were learning more about writing while you were doing it and trying new techniques. It was kind of cool to see the process actually. I'm glad I read this.
8747282
Tons of people love helping out authors on this site. I often see people credited as helping with editing or proofreading in the notes. ^^ I'm glad you enjoyed writing.
I liked it!