Night of Nightmares

Sweetie Belle is missing, but can Twilight and Rarity find her in time?

Note: this is going to be revised... eventually. I will be adding more haste, and a scene from Sweetie's perspective.

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Tailslover13

Tailslover13 #1 · Dec 7th, 2011 · · ·

That was...well, it had the makings to be really good, but...you kinda ruined it. First, it starts with Twilight having feelings for Rarity, and then the two have to go rescue her little sister, and then...Sweetie Belle winds up DEAD?!?! And then Rarity somehow giggles at the end, just because of the thought of Twilight loving her? Her little sister apparently was just killed...just getting over it and laughing and being happy THAT quickly is just...well, seriously, not right. It just didn't feel really natural...it felt so...so...cruel. Plus, there were errors scattered about, which didn't really help matters. It had a good premise, and I do love Twilight x Rarity, but...maybe it's just me, but seeing Rarity so easily seemingly get over her little sister's death...turned me off.

Darkevony

Darkevony #2 · Dec 18th, 2011 · · ·

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I like that quote in Fable 3 the one were the hero comes back from the book who held an old writer's plays. "Tragedy and Comedy join hands at last." except this doesn't have tragedy and only makes me sadder. Still you gotta admit, this was pretty good. I givez it 4.5.