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Midnight Song18


I used to think I was indecisive, but now I'm not too sure.

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Queen Celestia's six sons, Spike, Discord, Cheese Sandwich, Soarin, Fancy Pants, and Flash Sentry are to be married under royal law. The six of them are hesitant, but dutiful. At a Royal Ball thrown in hopes that the six of them can choose a mare to wed, they meet six mysterious girls who captivate them immediately. Uninterested in the suitors that come to call, they decide to take a break in Ponyville.

When they arrive in Ponyville, they reunite with the six girls who are willing to let them stay awhile. As the six brothers struggle not to fall for the girls they meet, Queen Celestia frantically sends her best guards on a search for the Princes.

Based on the title of 'Seven Brides For Seven Brothers', but not the content.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 31 )

I once read a story that was similar to this one. It's called The Midnight Dance

8696293
That sounds fun! Maybe I'll check it out! Thank you! :twilightsmile:

8696303
It's cool, but instead of the boys being Celestias children, it's the Mane Six. I'm assuming your going to include the same ships in your story

Rarity x Fancy Pants
Rainbow Dash x Soarin
Pinkie Pie x Cheese Sandwich
Applejack x Spike
Fluttershy x Discord
Twilight Sparkle x Flash Sentry

Comment posted by Midnight Song18 deleted Jan 27th, 2018

8696307 Yes. I ship all of the pairings from Bride of Discord, but you'll see me change it up in other stories from time to time. :raritywink:

8696314
So this does have FlashLight? I'm in!

Ah, the most classic of romantic beginnings. Falling on-top of a stranger in a uncomfortable position.
Truly, Soarin is the best anime pro-tag.

Why does this have a bunch of downvotes? Everything works here. The pacing is a bit too fast, but the story is working here.

8697651
I'm not sure. I would appreciate it if some people would give me their feedback on it. It does kinda hurt when I have more downvotes than upvotes. :applejackunsure:

8697710
Eh, don't worry about it. Keep going, you have an audience. Trust me on that.

8697820
Thank you so much! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far. It always helps to have someone who appreciates the effort you put into your writing. :twilightsmile:

The reason it's paced a little fast is because it was originally a screenplay and I only had about 2 and 1/2 hours to tell it all. If you have any feedback on how to pace the story a bit better, please do tell! Thanks! :heart:

8697823
...I actually don't have any real tips. I'm not good at advice. Sorry pal.

But please keep up the good work.

8697848
Aw, that's okay. Thank you for reading!

Some people might be down voting because of the shipping. Honestly, Raripants isn't one of my liked ships but I haven't down voted this. Some of the shipping here is so mainstream that it kind of get hate because of that. Honestly my favorite straight ships aren't really shown here at all. Rarity and Soarin, Discord or Big Mac are my Rarity straight ships, Flutterspike is my favorite spike ship, Rainbow and Fancypants or Blueblood are my favorite Rainbow straight ships, Pinkie and Caramel, Applejack and Blueblood or Fancypants, and Twilight and Braeburn. I'm weird okay, those ships are not common at all. Sometimes I also like Flutterlane and Fluttershy and Soarin.

But anyway besides my own likes, people see a lot of the ships that you have here. They are possible the top 10 of common straight ships, with maybe Applespike being the most uncommon. For some others, Flash Sentry is a boring character and they get very angry when he is shipped at all. There are only 19 votes as of right now though, so just hang in there and I'm sure that you will get more upvotes.

Also some of the story is too heavy in dialogue while other parts really need more. I think maybe going into detail about some of the attempts of the suitors to gain favor. Go into a little more detail about the goings ons of the characters. The flow of the story could be improved too.

Just remember that this is the first story you have on here. Most everyones first story has the most downvotes. (unless they are just attempting to get downvotes).

8702805
Thank you so much! That means a lot! :twilightsmile:

Celestia done fucked up good

I love how this started and continued... I'm also hoping to see some pictures if you get started on that.

8870369
Thank you! Unfortunately, I'm not an artist. I'm having trouble getting pictures at this moment.

8870673
don't you worry too much about the pictures I'm just reading your amazing fic. I was just curious.. anyways keep up the good work I read more and give feedback when I can.

Flash as the heir? :pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy: Okay, I know it makes him feel pressured and worried, but I'm just happy that people are giving him some love. :twilightsmile:

I can totally picture Trixie and Starlight as Luna's daughters. You sure took your sweet time telling us who they were though.

I like this. I like this a lot. Sure, it's a little fast and could use some more detail in some parts. I did love the part where Spike gets all romantic and annoys the living daylights out of Discord.

What happens next?! Please don't leave me hanging. Please. :fluttershysad:

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I love Flash Sentry and I devote some of my stories to giving him the "personality" people seem to think he doesn't have. :rainbowhuh: What I've seen of Flash Sentry is that he's kind and brave. I like to think of him as a loyal pony who would never abandon those he loves. :twilightsmile:

I guess I did take a bit of time to reveal that they were Starlight and Trixie. I'll try to do better with the pacing in future chapters.

I am sorry about the fast pacing though. It was originally a screenplay that was 2 1/2 hours long and I'm trying to slow down as best as I can. :twilightsmile:

I'm so glad that you're willing to give this story a chance though! It means a lot, especially after all the downvotes it got in the beginning of its submission. :heart:

Discord furrowed his brow. "Did you just point to all of me?"

hiccup would find this comment and understand the feeling of discord... :pinkiehappy:

9060407
I've seen some stories where he had anger control issues.
Also I think that stories where royals decide to go out into the streets and falls in love with another royal who had the same idea.

I don't know if this was intentional or not, but the film comes to mind with the title, and the plot (kinda)

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