Pinkie and Twilight

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This is just a short story I had written some months ago.
It isn't pre-read and I haven't work on it since I had sent it to equestriadaily.

I hope you like this story nevertheless;-)

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datdamnface

datdamnface #1 · Dec 5th, 2011 · 1 · ·

huh, cool story bro?

Anonymous XXX

Anonymous XXX #2 · Dec 5th, 2011 · 1 · ·

lol bingo. yeah, this could use some editing, but hey, i was forewarned so i'll ignore that. haha

AliCentaur Br0ny

AliCentaur Br0ny #3 · Dec 5th, 2011 · · ·

I haven't read it yet, but I love the reference to the "Pinkie and the Brain" T.V. show.

#4 · Dec 6th, 2011 · · ·

Other than why would twilight try to take over Equestria its great

Relentless Rain

Relentless Rain #5 · Dec 6th, 2011 · 1 · ·

As previously stated, this could use some editing and more work on grammar. Some more descriptive scenes would up the quality. It needs some work, but it reads OK for a quick short story (and it is more legible than some of the other stories I've read today, LOL!)

Scully

Scully #6 · Dec 9th, 2011 · 1 · ·

"After some more minutes Twilight finished her newest invention she had build with all her knowledge and just as usual Pinkie was her test subject. that should be built not build."
"Twilight put a futurist hat with many...." and that should be futuristic lol

Scully

Scully #7 · Dec 9th, 2011 · 1 · ·

hehehehe that was a good story lol

Shiron

Shiron #8 · Dec 18th, 2011 · 1 · ·

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thx

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that’s very nice^^ thank you

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I hope you’ll like it.

53205
thanks^^
Usually Twilight wouldn’t do something like this but after I saw a ponyfied Pinkie and the Brain clip I just had to make this story

53216
thanks^^
This story was for a contest on EqD and I think the contest had a word limit. Well, either this or I hadn’t enough time until the deadline of the contest.
If I would re-write it, it would be much bigger and without any mistakes but sadly I don’t have enough time for this.

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58106
thank you^^ I fixed both problems. If you find more errors I can fix them

Relentless Rain

Relentless Rain #9 · Dec 19th, 2011 · · ·

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I'm trying to get my own story featured on EqD, however I can never seem to get enough feedback (if any, LOL) to get an idea what is and isn't working right on my stories.

PaulRap Raptor

PaulRap Raptor #10 · Dec 28th, 2011 · 1 · ·

I have always enjoyed Pinky and the Brian. Good work.

nightmaster0

nightmaster0 #11 · Jul 1st, 2012 · · ·

Thank's for letting me know it was on fimfiction not just deviantart. I also look forward to when you start that story of your's with Twilight trying to take over equestria.

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