I love,love,love MLP and like to work on my headcannon and RP I mod an MLP forum. :3 Sunset Shimmer, Luna, and Celestia are my favorite ponies too I also like Applejack oh and I live in Oregon.
Amuro Allbright, Legendary hero of the Mars war, Knight of Harmony founder, the stalwart and longtime companion of princess Celestia, and lonely/bored old coot?
Amuro hasn't aged in so long, centuries as such he has seen alot come and go. So he latches onto some simple but important things:Mentoring other and his friendship with a certain senile teacher and his beloved princess.
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Needs a copy editor.
8159763 Well I have one now, this was mostly just a shot at a one shot since I usually do chapter stories on other sites
Hmm... interesting. Amuro definitely has an interesting and original fate—at least I haven't seen something similar yet
Indeed, he has all rights to feel pressed down by all the centuries laying on his withers.
However, I believe that the story could use a bit of care. Some of the sentences require to be split or at least to have punctuation added. The tenses are kind of jumpy as well. You could also play more with descriptions to indicate what's going on—for example, there is rather abrupt skip between the moment he runs into Inkwell and the point they are before her home. If you wish, I can help you and explain more.
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That would be super. I have trouble writing in this particular form. It was an experiment to see if I could and how it would turn out.
Any help with any of my fics is appreciated and you will get a special thanks if you do.
Furthermore Amuro was an MLP OC I crafted due to my extreme love of the Gundam franchise. I took inspiration for Amuro Allbright, The beast of possibility from Amuro Ray, the white Unicorn.
The overall idea is that he is a failed alicorn, he could not ascend and now he is stuck as a failure. Every day he works hard, every day he shows kindness, every day he shows he is a true knight and Celestia's most devoted follower. But he is still a failure and has slowly been whittled down into a depression.
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Hmm, which kind of form do you have in mind? That is, what is the form that suits you the best?
Anyway, I'll be glad to help. Do you use Google Documentss or a similar platform where I can highlight issues directly in the text? Due to the nature of the issues I pointed before, it would be the best method. We can discuss it through PMs if you wish.
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First person view/narration. Most of this fic is told from Amuro's perspective.
Sure lets discuss that via PM and I do have docs, I just never use it.
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That offer to edit my work still valid?
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Well, it depends on how fast you want it to be done, but yes
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I'm not in any rush, in fact I hardly ever am.
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Okay, then send me a PM and we can discuss it