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Rarity225
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Sequel?
Good for your second story. Left a like. But in the future. Try to describe things a bit better during the xxx scenes if you can it helps the readers get more immersed and it makes it feel longer for the readers. But other than that good job.
That was pretty good, but as the other guy said maybe try to describe thing more.
And if your taking requests/ideas for your next story Think you could do one of thees with Fleur de lis?
Have to say this was a decent story, not really a Starlight fan myself but since it was made in a similar style as Harms' series i figured ill give it a go.
Aside from spelling errors and feeling a bit rushed it was solid, although i cant help but notice that you drew a bit too much inspiration from Harms 1st story "Study Time" its very similar. But thats not really a bad thing i guess.