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Grasshopper Keller


Just a Colorado brony who makes some good stories. Celestia and Pinkie Pie are best ponies!

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(Author's Note: This is a tribute story to Harms Way, one of the best series writers that I was able to befriend on this website, while also reading his 'M' rated series. Have fun, my friend! :pinkiehappy:)

Check out the stories from Harms Way.

When Sunset Shimmer feels a little down from how her new friends at Canterlot High all have some boys going after them, an unassuming man from outside of the school comes calling for her heart.

Set after the Friendship Games movie.

My first attempt at making a 'T' rated story. Hope y'all enjoy!

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Comments ( 13 )

For every like, a dozen cookies and a six pack of beer will be given! :pinkiehappy:

Moved a bit fast it seemed, though a very sweet story at times and I did feel for Sunset.

Awwww cute, if not a bit fast

Cute, i like it

Loved it,didnt really find anything wrong with the story itself but i tend to overlook stuff like that when it comes to Sunset fics,what can i say im a sucker for Sunset storys :heart: Also im glad that you made the Male character a seperate entity,all those "Anon" storys were getting a bit boring. Overall pretty good first attempt i would say,hope to see more like this.

7244402 you think you can link me to this friend of yours. I'd love to read his stuff, and you kinda didn't do that in the description.:pinkiehappy:

Dude. I have only one word to describe this story.......

AWESOME!!!!!!! :rainbowdetermined2:

Thank you so much for writing this. :twilightsmile:

Hmm it was fun to read, that's without a doubt.
The only problem I have with this is their relationship: it looks too rushed and unrealistic ("we should first be friends and then start dating" -> they start making out; "we should wait a couple dates before making out again"-> 2 minutes afterwards they are making out for 10 minutes; they haven't even had a date and they say they love each other :unsuresweetie: ). And based on my experience, those types of relations burn fastly and end quickly :duck:
But that just might be my perception of how people get to know and start dating and yada yada yada.
It was fun to read and it made me smile. So nice job :twilightsmile:

7244402 I'd tell you to fork over the beer and cookies, then see how many beers I can handle in a single hour and how cookies and beer tastes, but this didn't grab me... That's not to say that this wasn't well written, I'm just personally more of a fan of the Fics where they first become friends then hit it off then melt either onto or into each other. That's just personal preference... You know what? You owe me cookies and beer because this was well made. Gimme The Booze And Sugar Discs!

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I've read some fics where that actually seems possible. Just read Thunder and Lightning, a second person fic where Rarity's your dream girl and you find her in a time of mass need. That ends in a make out session, but I could see it happening.

7811735 hmm I'll check that fic later but that doesn't change my point. If what you say it's true, the fanfic about Rarity is a bit more realistic. But this one still feels too rushed.

This is great. I mean the pacing is fast and I feel like they say I love you waay too quick considering they just met.
Still I enjoyed it. Nice work. :twilightsmile:

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Fair point. First attempt and all.

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