• Member Since 7th May, 2015
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Oldtakufanboy


Original username Zoddtheimmortalone. I'm a fan of anime, but I enjoy the classics more. As for My Little Pony, I may not watch it as much, but I do like the show and I also love EG

Comments ( 19 )

Love each and every one of your stories. Keep up the good work :twilightsmile:

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Thank you so much for the comment. Made my day

Awesome! What's next?

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I'm gonna continue on a Skystar clopfic I've been working on before this.

Two chapters are available if you're interested

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Oh, okay! I've read the two chapters for it! I'm liking it!

Will you do an EG Rarity story? One better than the other story you made?

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I may do if it comes to mind

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No prob bro. Also like your work on fanfiction.net

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Oh! Thank you.

Sorry, I know I haven't posted much on there in a while

Nice. A couple minor mistakes, but otherwise really good.

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Great job!

A little rushed in certain parts, but still a great story.

Nice work with the great and powerful bimbo. :raritywink:

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Glad you enjoyed it

“I'm different to most of the guys around here, due to myself being one of the smartest students of this school that has less time to be thinking about sex and more about my education.“
r/iamverysmart

I wonder will you make some stories that featured the Crystal Prep girls

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I have. Not many, but I’ll do more in the future

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Am I wrong for reading this in (toxic) ricks voice

I feel like this story is abit too generic/cliche, which isn't always a bad thing. I mean the story sets up this guy to not like this girl because of what she does around the school. After being paired with her, she immediately tries to get in his pants, to which he doesn't like. Later, Trixie tries to make him jealous and break his focus for studying (while I wouldn't have handled the situation like he did) at the very least he gave a reasonable reaction, only to be brow-beaten/ threatened by Starlight who expositions that its Trixie's way of saying she likes him, which (imo) doesn't exactly mean that she's justified for her actions. But for the sake of the story he apologizes andjust instantly starts to like her and after studying, they screw. There was no actual growth between the two and so the romance just seems slightly artificial. This is similar to Kingdom Hearts, only no ice cream, friendship is replaced with highschool drama/romance
Ik this is a one-shot, but the critique in me just wished for better. I'm not trying to dis you or say it's terrible, because all in all it was a decent story. I just wish it didn't seem so forced

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