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Rythm of change

Cameron lives a simple life until his time came to leave this world, but only to enter another world, he was someone didn't like to take risks, but now things change

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JackRipper

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JackRipper #1 · Jul 19th, 2017 · · ·

This story needs an editor; it's riddled with punctuation and grammar errors, the pacing is ridiculously fast and the main protagonist is just plain bland. Don't cram nine-thousand words worth of content into a less than four thousand word chapter.

Till_the-end

Till_the-end #2 · Jul 19th, 2017 · · ·

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First story, just made this account, I'm new and I don't know a lot of people, I'm sorry that you don't like it

JackRipper

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JackRipper #3 · Jul 19th, 2017 · · ·

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That's fine, because you have plenty of time to improve. Here, this group will help you find an editor for your story should you choose to follow my advice.

https://www.fimfiction.net/group/97/looking-for-editors

Till_the-end

Till_the-end #4 · Jul 19th, 2017 · · ·

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honestly, I didn't think it was gonna work out, I'm not a slice of life kind of guy really, I just wanted to see if I could do it, I obviously rush things though, probably because my life is very rushed...anyways, I apparently am better at thriller than anything, I might as well just keep doing what I work best with