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It was a normal day for Autumn. She was cooking breakfast at Finn and Jake's house because you know what? Because she can. But then something... odd happens....

READ TO FIND OUT :D

FINALLY I GOT THE PICTURE IN :pinkiegasp:

Thanks to Shimmer Shy for helping me with some editing! :raritywink::yay::pinkiehappy::ajsmug::twilightsheepish::moustache:

.:EDIT:. Currently working on SECOND STORY!! :pinkiegasp: :pinkiehappy:

Chapters (5)
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Interesting idea so far. I like it! Tracking! :pinkiehappy:

There were a few punctuation errors here and there. If you need an editor, I could help you out. :twilightsmile:

>>Shimmer Shy That would be helpful! :moustache: :derpytongue2:

7875517 Alright. I'll PM you, if that's OK?

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my mom doesnt have internet. :T

w8 wut how

"Is it done yet?"

Pretty good opening.

That is a portal. To one of my dimensions.

That's... really unexpected. The explanation that comes in the next line helps a little, but this is still a little jarring.

Overall pretty good for your fist chapter of your first story. it's a little short, but that's ok. :moustache::moustache::moustache:/5

"Does he come from Ooo, too?"

:rainbowderp:... *checks tags* *finally realizes that the other two characters are Finn and Jake* *checks tags again*
You appear to be missing the "crossover" tag.

Buuuut, I do know who does!

It's Discord, isn't it?

Twilight asked excitedly.

Aaaaaannnnnd... it wasn't discord.
It was worth a shot though. :derpytongue2:

Autumn shook it off. It was just a dream, right?

Is... is this... FORSHADOWING? bc if it is then it's pretty good FORSHADOWING.

And now we wait...

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