• Member Since 12th Jan, 2017
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It was a normal day for Autumn. She was cooking breakfast at Finn and Jake's house because you know what? Because she can. But then something... odd happens....



Thanks to Shimmer Shy for helping me with some editing! :raritywink::yay::pinkiehappy::ajsmug::twilightsheepish::moustache:

.:EDIT:. Currently working on SECOND STORY!! :pinkiegasp: :pinkiehappy:

Chapters (5)
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Interesting idea so far. I like it! Tracking! :pinkiehappy:

There were a few punctuation errors here and there. If you need an editor, I could help you out. :twilightsmile:

>>Shimmer Shy That would be helpful! :moustache: :derpytongue2:

7875517 Alright. I'll PM you, if that's OK?

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my mom doesnt have internet. :T

w8 wut how

"Is it done yet?"

Pretty good opening.

That is a portal. To one of my dimensions.

That's... really unexpected. The explanation that comes in the next line helps a little, but this is still a little jarring.

Overall pretty good for your fist chapter of your first story. it's a little short, but that's ok. :moustache::moustache::moustache:/5

"Does he come from Ooo, too?"

:rainbowderp:... *checks tags* *finally realizes that the other two characters are Finn and Jake* *checks tags again*
You appear to be missing the "crossover" tag.

Buuuut, I do know who does!

It's Discord, isn't it?

Twilight asked excitedly.

Aaaaaannnnnd... it wasn't discord.
It was worth a shot though. :derpytongue2:

Autumn shook it off. It was just a dream, right?

Is... is this... FORSHADOWING? bc if it is then it's pretty good FORSHADOWING.

And now we wait...

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