It was a normal day for Autumn. She was cooking breakfast at Finn and Jake's house because you know what? Because she can. But then something... odd happens....
READ TO FIND OUT :D
FINALLY I GOT THE PICTURE IN
Thanks to Shimmer Shy for helping me with some editing!
.:EDIT:. Currently working on SECOND STORY!!
Interesting idea so far. I like it! Tracking!
There were a few punctuation errors here and there. If you need an editor, I could help you out.
>>Shimmer Shy That would be helpful!
7875517 Alright. I'll PM you, if that's OK?
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7875938 PMing me will be fine
w8 wut how
Pretty good opening.
That's... really unexpected. The explanation that comes in the next line helps a little, but this is still a little jarring.
Overall pretty good for your fist chapter of your first story. it's a little short, but that's ok. /5
... *checks tags* *finally realizes that the other two characters are Finn and Jake* *checks tags again*
You appear to be missing the "crossover" tag.
It's Discord, isn't it?
Aaaaaannnnnd... it wasn't discord.
It was worth a shot though.
Is... is this... FORSHADOWING? bc if it is then it's pretty good FORSHADOWING.
And now we wait...
8126428 oops I'll add that on