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This story is a sequel to Fallout: Equestria - The Hooves of Fate

Rose Petal, a filly who sees the future in dreams and visions, gets a glimpse of Manehattan during turbulent times.  Princess Celestia has resigned, Equestria is on the brink of war, and the whole city erupts upon hearing the news.  Rose Petal struggles to see one little filly to safety, and to make sense of a future that's seemingly doomed.

First Published
22nd Dec 2016
Last Modified
22nd Dec 2016
#1 · 13w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

(Not sure how much commentary I'll have, I'm afraid; I'm in a bit of a hurry at present.)

Oh, hm, was the war ten years longer in this universe, or Littlehorn much earlier?  Assuming that my memory isn't glitching here, but I'm pretty confident about it on this.

"The There are too many"

"There"?

"and it's tumultuous middle, and it's nice neat little "

"its" and "its"?

...Shouldn't the Foreword be at the beginning of the story?

#2 · 13w, 3d ago · · ·

They wouldn't let me put the foreword at the beginning.  The story was originally rejected, and FIM insisted that all author's notes go in the slot designated for it.

#3 · 13w, 3d ago · · ·

>>7812887

Fixed "its."  Can't find "There are too many."

I suppose it would make more sense to ditch the word "Foreword," even though it was originally intended to be read first.

Thanks!

#4 · 13w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

>>7812887 No, the timeline is the same as base FOE. Hell he's got ME acting as his editorial whipping boy and, yeah like I'd let something alter FOE canon:derpytongue2:

The war started ~ 10 years after the show, well at least ten years or so after season 2-ish, it lasted ~ 20 years, with Littlehorn taking place about halfway through.

#5 · 13w, 3d ago · · ·

Why are you making a sequel if you didn't finish the first story?

#6 · 13w, 3d ago · · ·

Shouldn't you wait until the previous story is finished before starting this one?

#7 · 13w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

>>7813023 >>7813035

It's not really a 'sequel' so much as a sidestory. Do note it's marked as complete. Just a quick one shot that's in canon with the main story, but doesn't really fit well as part of the main narrative flow.

#8 · 13w, 3d ago · · ·

Okay, this is interesting. You have my attention.

#9 · 13w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

>>7812890

...Huh.  That's odd.  Maybe put it in a quote, instead of an author's note?

>>7812894

Oh, are you the author who looks for things manually?  If so, sorry for forgetting.

"It's footage of Princess Luna, dressed up in full military regalia, standing before a podium.  Words scroll by underneath, but I can't see them.  I'm too small.  The There are too many shoulders.  

I try to push myself forward.  To see what's going on.  But all I can see is legs, and shoulders, and legs, and shoulders, and shoulders, and shoulders, and even more shoulders."

Well, if you don't move it, probably, and perhaps reformat a bit for its current position.  Or change the heading to something indicating it was mean to be a foreword, perhaps.

You're welcome!

>>7812936

Ah, then you've got a significant typo:

"Only I don't make it as far as the Big Boom - the megaspell that annihilates Equestria.  My internal clock tells me it's about two decades before."

Two decades before the end of the twenty-year war would be, well, not the middle of it.  :)

#10 · 13w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>7813568 Ohhhhh.. how the hell did we miss that one.....

#11 · 13w, 2d ago · · ·

>>7814168

Don't know, I'm afraid, but these things do happen.

#12 · 13w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>7813035

As I mentioned in my blog, and in the author's notes, this is a side story that takes place further along in Rose's timeline than the current point in the larger story.  I actually originally wrote a foreword at the top of the story to avoid confusion, but the FimFic admins made me change it for formatting consistency.  

Author's Notes only go on the bottom.

#13 · 12w, 3d ago · 3 · ·

:heart:

That ending was beautiful.  And the story had one hell of an emotional wallop.  The message is a particularly timely one.  

I was particularly moved by the dichotomy of the individual actions versus the way things looked when taken as a whole.  I really loved how you tied it into Hearth's Warming Eve.  

You write Fallout: Equestria and explore the themes and lessons in it amazingly well.  As always, I am both in awe and in your debt.  Thank you!

:twilightsmile:

#14 · 11w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

Good stuff!

Deeply touching and very interesting, as always.  I'm patiently impatiently  waiting for new chapters of the main story.

Ugh i wish i was better at the whole leaving good comments thing

#15 · 9w, 5d ago · · ·

I got into this late but shows that Dogging still cares. I belive that mentationing of his Pathreon in a new chapter would help getting dat moneh.

This story makes me wonder if we'll see some more hero progression in the main HoF, like stripping Petal to something that could heal her up while she gets hit in the timeline she visits. Like purges hellish ammounts of radiation while she keeps exposing herself to it. I also think she cannot sufficate when beeing away because her body still hangs around and brethes in the orginal timeline.

But the text underneath it has changed since the riot had broken out.  Some projectionist somewhere, in the heat of the moment,  must have altered it.  Another small act of rebellion.

Instead of subtitling the images, the panel just scrolls a message - the same six words again, and again, and again.

This is not who we are.  This is not who we are.  This is not who we are.  This is not who we are.

#16 · 8w, 6d ago · · ·

>>7874912

Is that an anarchist Rainbow Dash?

#17 · 8w, 6d ago · · ·

>>7892259 No, a hacker RD. The clothes are from the Watch Dogs game.

Anarchists would actually have purely black clothes, the @narchy sign and red-black flags.

It's kindda a jab at the hackers who put the "it's not who we are" on the billboards.

#18 · 1d, 4h ago · · ·

>>7813352 I guess you're reading (or have read) the main story then?

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