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Sharp Shadow is like any pony, just a not so normal family. Since Shadow's father was a programmer, he had been astounded by the digital world. He often told his son Shadow stories of a world where digital heroes fight evil. This place is known as the Grid. Sadly, he disappeared one night without a trace. Twenty years, after he suddenly vanishes, an old family friend comes to visit. He said he received a page from Shadow's father, and strangely enough, it came from an old arcade building he used to own. Wanting answers, Sharp Shadow looks in the arcade for his father only to find his greatest adventure yet! *First fanfic lol and is closely related to Tron: Legacy, like I mean, if you compare the movie to this book, they're almost exactly the same, just different dialogue and such, secondly I got this idea because I was a huge MLP and Tron fan so I thought why not mix both? You hve to admit, if you read it, it came out decent right? Plus, there's also a reference to the Tron video game Tron: Evolution.*

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 17 )

This has similarity to the movie I've seen it 15 times and I believe you can make the action more suspense. I be happy to help you out with it. If its okay with you.:pinkiesmile: I was newbie last week til i made my first story and its coming great. :rainbowdetermined2:

Yeah, I would have made it more intense,:moustache: but uh, idk. I guess if you want, you can read it, and if you can, add/delete stuff that would make it more suspenseful.:pinkiehappy: id very much appreciate it.:rainbowkiss:

So wait. Is this guy an Alicorn or something? Because you mention the fact of him flying at the beginning of this chapter yet half way through it your saying he is using magic. It would make sense if he was a Pegasus because of the whole motorcycle stuff in 'Tron: Legacy' but a unicorn as well. If I were you I'd re think through this chapter. I'm not trying to be rude but this chapter those need some tweaking.

Yeah i should have said something xD sry bout tht thx lol.
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All kinds of constructive criticism is actually greatly needed because since I'm still sorta new to this, I want this book to be as good as possible. :pinkiehappy: All kinds of help will be greatly appreciated. :moustache: Thanks a bunch. :trollestia: :scootangel:

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maybe he's a unicorn with gravity enchanted spells

in these 5 chapters you just knocked out a good 30-45 min of the movie:pinkiehappy:

nice just slow down and put in SOME :ajbemused:actions of background ponies like "one pony that drinking a lot and was all zapped up fell over and passed out in front of me:ajsleepy: so i stepped over him" this is just to help decribe it but feel free to use it:raritystarry:

um....no need to sound like a jackass.....but....when are you gonna start the next chapter? :unsuresweetie: it's been a while since you did so, man. :fluttershysad: don't get me wrong, i love your story. top notch detail.....but when's the next chapter?

Seems promising. I'll put it in my Read It Later list.

Do me a favor and believe your dad.:facehoof:

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