• Published 27th Sep 2016
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Black Bloom - Bronycommander



May 16th 200- This day changed the world. Can a security guard and a Marine get a filly who got here by the incident to safety before it's too late?

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Chapter 8 End of the Line

Chapter 8: End of the line

They stepped outside. Despite the airstrikes, two Black Mesa SUVs were still intact. Harriers were dogfighting Alien aircrafts. It was evening as the beautiful sunset ruled the sky. Michael tried to open the gate with a crowbar, while Tower tried to start a SUV.

“We owe you one, Corporal. Without you and your men, we had died in there.”

“You owe us nothing, Jacob. It was our duty and our Job. I’m not only glad that I survived but that also Apple Bloom survived.” Mia handled her over to him.

“Thank you all! Without you, Ah'd had died in there!” She hugged Konrad tightly.

“Apple Bloom, it’s nothing really.”

A portal opened. Konrad and Jacob aimed their weapons at it. A middle-aged Caucasian male with a tall, thin physique, pale skin, a prominent widow's peak, black hair styled in a crew cut, and pale green eyes, dressed in a gray-blue suit stepped out.

“Hey, I know you. You were the man who saved me and Apple Bloom back in Sector E.”

“Yes Corporal Ford, that is correct. I’m impressed. You’re all managed to survive against all odds.”

“Why are you here?” Jacob asked. The man took a deep breath.

“My employers want no witnesses. But as you worked so hard together to survive and get out of here, I… will let you go. However, I have one condition: Nobody is allowed to know what happened here.”

“Nobody would believe this anyway. But can you help her get home?”

“That’s why I’m here, Mrs. Johnson.” He opened a portal. “Just step through the portal. It will send you were back were you belong.” Another portal opened.

“If you excuse me, this is where I get off.” He leaved through the portal that opened and it closed, while the portal to Apple Bloom's home stayed open.

“Ah will miss you!”

“We will too. Oh, before I forgot,” Konrad took a part of his mask off while Jacob did the same with his helmet.
“These are our helmet cameras. They record anything we have been experienced. It should help your family to find answers.” Jacob did one last hug.

“Have a safe trip home, Apple Bloom!” Tower said to her as she entered the portal.

However, she found herself in some kind of lab with a teleporter.

“Hurry up, Freeman, I can't keep it open forever!” She saw how Gordon jumped into a portal, a marine close behind. He looked like Konrad; except he wore fingerless gloves instead of normal gloves like Konrad wore and had no Uniform Patches on his arms.

The teleporter malfunctioned, and they both were sucked in. The marine tried to grab something while shouting, “No, no, no, no, nooo!” but to no avail. Apple Bloom found herself on an asteroid-like island while the marine was on another island. The marine looked around into the sky, then scratched his back and said, “Well, if I ever get out of here, Konrad will never believe this.”

Another portal opened and a pegasus pony with dark red coat with lighter red tail, a blue green mane, and blue green shades came out. He also wore a locket made of crystals, carried a pouch and had a black scarf and two sword daggers on his back.

"Hey! HEY! Get these guys off me!" He shouted as 3 other ponys dressed like Black Ops chased him. The marine killed two of them with a grenade while the last one was knocked out.

"Thanks. I thought I would never lose them. Now to us." He tackled the Black Ops that recovered through the portal they came from but dropped one of his daggers and his pouch. The Marine picked them up as he thought they could be useful. Apple Bloom was so surprised where she was, that she noticed nothing of what just happened.

“Oops, wrong portal.” The filly heard the voice of the man, who opened the portal, then she was teleported away, and she passed out.

The marine saw how she teleported away and mumbled, “The first thing I’m gonna do when I’m out of here, is gonna have a drink.”


We made it Jacob, we made it!” Mia kissed him.

“Engine is running, let’s go.”Tower said as Michael had opened the gate.
They all leaved the compound forever, to an uncertain future. They enjoyed the beautiful sunset, not knowing that it would be the last of the peaceful earth.


Doctor Stable was checking Apple Bloom after she returned. Everywhere in Equestria, portals showed up, but vanished soon after they showed up.

The filly was the only victim. She returned through a portal but unconscious. As Doctor Stable checked her condition, he noticed something strange.

First, she had a different ribbon and second, she had two small devices in her hooves.

Her head and right hoof were bandaged and Blood was seeping through. Doctor Stable ordered Nurse Redheart to open both bandages and prepare two new sterile bandages. The wounds had stopped bleeding and while that was good, he noticed something really odd.
“Is this…a bite mark on her head!?”

“I’m afraid so!” Nurse Redheart was worried.

Both wounds were cleaned and sterilized. It turned out that she had received some trauma to the head but it was a kind of trauma he had never seen before.

“Have her set for an X-Ray just to be sure she hasn't fractured anything. Other than that, she seems fine, but I wonder who cleaned her wound and more importantly, who or what caused it?”

“I think that those two devices should give answers.” Nurse Redheart pointed to them. They were on a table.

After a while, the family and friends of Apple Bloom arrived.

“Hello Doctor Stable, is Apple Bloom alright?” Granny Smith asked.

“Yes she is. I will lead you to her room.
“Apple Bloom is in stable condition and she’ll be just fine. She’s suffered some minor head trauma, a few scrapes and bruises, and…a bite from what appears to have been caused by something,” Doctor Stable explained.

The reaction was heartbreaking. Crying, Granny Smith and Big Mac ran over to the little filly and began to stroke her mane with their hooves.
“We almost lost our precious little apple!” cried Granny Smith.

“Eey*sniff*yup!” replied Big MacIntosh.

Soon, the Mane Six, followed by Scootaloo, Sweetie Belle and even Princess Celestia joined them.

“Greetings, Doctor. How is my subject doing?”

“She’ll be fine your Highness. For some reason, she had those with her.” He pointed to the devices.

Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo gave their friend a hug while Applejack cried her heart out. It was understandable at the state of their youngest family member.

"Ah never thought I'd see any of mah grandchildren like this ever! Mah poor heart!" cried Granny Smith.

“I think that those devices are called ‘helmet cameras.’ They are used by military and Security personal.” Twilight inspected the cameras. On one was standing: „Black Mesa Security Force, Jacob Johnson”, while on the other stood: “Hazardous Environment Combat Unit, United States Marine Corps Special Forces Unit, Konrad Ford.”

“Oh, we are watching a movie? I get the popcorn!” Pinkie Pie vanished and returned with drinks and a giant bucket of Popcorn in a blink of an eye.

She also managed somehow to activate the camera of Ford, showing how they were transported to Black Mesa. The pilot talked with the HQ.

“Okay, Goose 8. Proceed to sector 112 LZ and rendezvous with Alpha Bravo Tango. Over.”

“Copy that, HQ."

"Watch your vector, Goose 4. It's getting little tight in here.”

“Roger that, we copy.”

“Anyone out there got a good view of the LZ yet?”

"Negative, Goose 8. I can see some activity up there, but I can't tell what it is.” The pilot of Goose 9 replied. Then the soldiers had a conversation.

“Where are we anyway?” a marine with the nametag Tower asked.

“Well, the pilot thought we were headin' to your mother's house, heh. So far this all looks familiar.” A marine called Jackson replied.

“Yeah, that’s real cute, Jackson.”

“Anytime, anywhere!”

“Hey man, you smell that?” “Smell what?”

“Smells like... smells like another babysittin' job to me, man.”

“Heh, yeah.”

“Babysittin' job my ass. This has training mission written all over It.” a marine called David commented.

“Why else would they have kept our orders from us for so long, huh?”

“Yeah, what the hell is that all about? Throwin' our asses in this hunk of junk and not even tellin' us what we're goin' in for, man."

"Do you have a problem, private? We will give you your orders when we have reached the LZ. You got that, soldier?" a marine named Tanner asked him in a commanding tone.

"Sir, yes, Sir!"

“Well, I don't really give a damn what we're going in for. Long as I get to kill me something.”

“I heard that.” Michael commented to Jackson.

“Man, if this is another ‘search and rescue’ operation, I'm gonna be pissed.”

“Yeah, I'm gonna be pissed too when I gotta search and rescue your sorry ass.”

“Hey Konrad, can you tell us something about our mission?”

“Negative Tower, I have strictly order to give our orders when we reach the LZ.”

Twilight stopped the recording. “Since Jacob's recording is beginning earlier, we should watch it first.”

“Do that, Twilight.” Pinkie Pie was excited.


After some time

Apple Bloom awoke slowly. She was surrounded by her family and friends. “Apple Bloom! You’re awake!” Sweetie Belle exclaimed happy.

“Yeah Ah am. I’m just glad that Ah made it out of Black Mesa alive.” Applejack hugged her sister.

“Shh, It’s over, you’re safe now.”
Pinkie Pie had an Idea. “Hey, since you’re back Apple Bloom, what about a party?”

“Yes Pinkie Pie, Ah would love it. Do you want to come too, your Highness?”

“How can I refuse? Of course.”

Since Apple Bloom was still weakened, she was carried by Applejack on her back. She had only one thought.

We’re all are grateful that you helped her to survive. We will never forget what you have done for her. Applejack thought as she walked to Sugarcube corner.

She couldn’t help but smile at the thought, of Jacob and Mia being Apple Blooms parents and Konrad being her uncle.

But Nopony and body expected that Apple Bloom would meet them again. In an altered world, with new enemies and new hazards.

Author's Note:

Black Bloom is done! A sequel is already in progress set in Half Life 2. Those who played Half Life and its expansion pack should know who the marine was.

redsopine wanted his OC in my Story so I granted his wish. I hope you liked it.

Also, HumanSVD, it was an honor for me to use your OC, keep up the good work, sir.

Even if it's just a game, Everyone who got out alive may thank God.

Comments ( 31 )

thanks dude and loved it

7626515 Glad to hear it :twilightsmile:

As said in the note , a squel is planned. ts plays in Half Life 2 and Half life 2 takes place 20 years after the first Half life acording to the wikia.

As with my others storys, I will put music in links. By the way, Did I put the music in Forget about Freeman in the right place?

I hope you enjoyed the scenes and Music I put in as links. Forgot about Freeman is my favorite soundtrack in the game because of the drums which fits the scene perfectly, We got hostiles and Questionable Ethics 1.

7626570 sounds cool and you gave me a great fanfic linking idea if u wanna colab on it

7626578 im in
Black Bloom 2 should be made between sunday and Next week

Cute, I liked the ending a lot and overall the story, but I would suggest you have sent to it someone who could have edited it a bit before publishing it.

Couple things,

Konrad wouldn't have known Freeman killed in self defense unless he witnessed something to the contrary. Otherwise, he would have shot him (if Applebloom wasn't there). And even if she was, you could have portrayed it as her begging him not too kill Freeman and have him as a prisoner, only to discover what really happened and let Freeman go and earn his help.

I know the game is a bit unclear about their mission in regards to the scientists. In opposing force, you see the scientists help the Marines and you're not explicitly kiling them, nor are they registered as enemies. You could have portrayed it as their orders were initially kill aliens and rescue facility personel for debrief, but have the Black Ops guys give conflicting orders by either killing and hacking the radio commands, or see Konrad witness the Black Ops guys kill marines and or impersonate the Marines, and the Squad helps them.

You also missed out on a good joke. At the end where there's a recording of their banter in the help transport, a joke about baby sitting job was made. You could have made the Squad, or anyone make a crack at Konrad saying, "Well, looks like it is a baby sitting job after all! Take care of her!"

"What?! Why me?"

"Because she's attached to you."

*looks at his leg and sees the filly wrapped around him in fear*

Sigh. " yes sir...."

Anyway, overall good, just try to get an editor if you can next time. 8/10

7630814
I'm in an Editor group but nobody has replied so far. About the joke, I can edit this.

I am pleased to hear that you enjoyed it and I hope you enjoy the squel too. Should be uploaded soon.

About his Dreams, they were references to your storys and I'm sure Konrad would make a good father for ruby like Helmut in my other Story

By the way, the explaination about the mp5, shotgun and pistol were the most realistic i could come up with why the marines use them in the game. Any idea how I could explain it better?

I also hope you enjoyed the music and scenes i added as links. The Topside battle with the music, dogfight and sunset is just beautiful,isn't it?

7630814
I had the idea that the marines got Order to kill those connected to the project and to rescue those who are not. As for Freeman, based on the orders they got, Konrad suspected that Gordon acted in self defense

8057401 don't be sorry, I apprechiate such comments to improve. Details are my greatest weakness in writing. Regardless, I Hope you enjoy the rest of the story

8057904 Thanks for taking criticism so damn great.

I recommend you share your story with a writing group (Just search for "writing" in the Groups tab and you should find plenty of groups that can help you).

Hope this story improves!

8069406 thanks for the advice, I improved with some other storys i wrote. Hope you enjoy this story still

8069406 And I did combine the chapters of Black Mesa/Half life together so the first chapter woudn't be too long.

8090769
When will I get the spotlight?
Also it's Shephard, not Shepard.

8911461
The Story was supposed to Show the incident From the pov of others than just the Player characters.

9831095
Believe me, I’ve seen WAY worse.
You can get a free proofreader here https://www.fimfiction.net/group/27/]The Proofreader Group

9831134
Thanks, but I got not good experience with proofreaders

9831095
Hey, so... This could be an interesting story - both of them could be - but they need a major rewrite.

So you're better now? How about a rewrite, please? ;]


I mean, you already know what's supposed to happen... just make it, you know, readable. ;D

If I may offer the one thing that bothered me the most, it would be how much the characters just "go with it" to the point of imprinting on each other like goddamn chicks. Ponies may be trusting, but humans treat the unknown with a good amount of nope - and that goes especially for things that crawl out of Black Mesa... ;] She could be worse than a xenomorph, you know? ;D Headcrabs are cute, remember?

YES THEY ARE!

9926996
Someday, maybe. If i get the Time.

9962699
Well that's understandable. And I know she was grateful for being saved

I liked it! There were some problems like pacing (it all felt way too fast) and grammar, but it wasn’t unreadable. You had a good idea, I think it was just poorly executed. No offense, of course.

But eh. It’s not like I’m some genius Edgar Allen Poe writer man, I don’t really have a right to be up here on some high-horse.

Looking forward to reading the sequel!

10404816
Glad you liked it. as I said, was one of first stories

Improvement - The Introduction of Gordon to the Characters.
The story was compelling, and an interesting idea. However there is one thing that could be improved, which is when Apple Bloom is introduced to Gordon. I believe that it would be best to have them meet after the topside battle at the beginning of “We’ve got Hostiles.”

In the story, one of the marines mentioned how he knew that Gordon was fighting and killing the HECU, however the story does not explain how. A good way to feed the character, and some of the other characters this knowledge would be to have them witness the topside battle at the beginning of “We’ve Got Hostiles.” as spectators. This would allow for the other characters, such as Apple Bloom, to be introduced to Gordon in a way that emphasized Gordon fighting the HECU.

This is one thing that the story would benefit from, should you decide to do a rewrite/remake of the story.

11516002
well said, it was one of my first works from my younger years, that the Marine understands Gordin fighting them, simple logic and rational thinking, If you here to silence everyone, it makes sense Gordon is acting in pure self defense. Tat I made him met during on a rail, so to introduce gim seperarly, plus the time skip to the next day, as its night here

A Half-life crossover FIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

FUCK YES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!




I shall read.

11681349
Okay...hope you can enjoy it, dispite being one of my first fics. Its one of the few half life onces on fim that is completed too

11681376
Hope you can enjoy the sequel too. I actually thought about improving both but feel kinda too proud

11681392
I love half-life... so I'm going to be bias.

11681393
Fair. I enjoyed Black mesa very much

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