• Published 9th Sep 2016
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I Forgive You - LaysPotatoChips



This is my version of what I thought should have been in "The Times they are a Changeling".

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I'm Sorry

I Forgive You

"Thorax, I just want to apologize!" Spike yelled out as he continued to search around for his best friend Thorax.

There was no answer, not like he really expected one for that manner. The guilt that was building up in his body was one that he had never felt before in his life. Of course, he had felt guilt before, but the intensity of the guilt that he was feeling was a lot higher than what he normally felt when he did something wrong. It felt more like a ripping sensation. Kind of like a bear tearing at a beehive for honey, that's how he felt. Spike continued to look to and fro for Thorax; lifting up boulders, scraping away at snow, and even tapping stalagmites, but all where in vain. Thorax was no where in site.

"Maybe he isn't here." Spike said to himself as his spines dropped," Doesn't really surprise me though, I really messed up."

Spike sat down on the snow for a few seconds, trying to think of places where Thorax could have gone to, but nothing really popped up in his head. He could have been anywhere at this point in time. Taking in a deep breath, Spike decided to call out once more, just to see if he could get any kind of reaction.

"I should have stood up for you" Spike began, tears building up in his eyes" come on Thorax, I know your in here!"

The final phrase echoed repeatedly, the words "In here" repeating over and over again until it died down to a near whisper. Spike's spines drooped as he came to the realization that his friend, or former friend that is, just wasn't there. Spike sighed, and started making his way out of the cave in defeat. Not only had he lost a friend that day, the entire Chrystal Empire was now going insane because of him. Just as he was about to start climbing out of the cave, he heard something. Placing his claw next to his ear, he listened closer. It was rather hard to make out, but he could have sworn that he heard distant crying in the background. Spike tip toed towards the direction of the sound, making sure that he walked slowly as to not be heard. It didn't take too long for him to finally find the source of the sound. Just to make sure that he wouldn't be seen, Spike carefully hid behind a large stalagmite, and peaked his head out slowly so that the only thing that would be visible was his eyes. What he saw, not only fueled the fire of guilt that was raging inside him like a fiery inferno, but also shattered his heart into a million tiny pieces. There, less than two feet away, was Thorax. He was lying down on a patch of snow that was guarded by a few stray crystals that littered the path. Thorax was on his side, facing away from the stalagmite that Spike was hiding behind, his front hooves where draped over his head, and his body shook. The soft crying that had led Spike to the path where Thorax was, was now reduced to a contained sob. Spike looked over at Thorax and almost broke down himself. He didn't realize that he had hurt Thorax that bad, but looking at the state that he was now in at the time, he knew he had to try and make this better.

"T...Thorax?" Spike asked trying to hold back tears

No Response

"Thorax." Spike repeated, this time a bit louder than before

Thorax gave a quick glance at the dragon and said

"Go away."

"Come on Thorax, I'm really sorry for what I did back there." Spike pleaded

Thorax turned his head back, and lied it back down on his hooves.

"Fine. Now go away." Thorax said coldly

Spike's eyes widened at the response that Thorax had given him.

"Thorax...I told you I was sorry." Spike said as his eyes began watering

"Are you now?" Thorax said sarcastically

Thorax slowly got up from his position, and turned around to face Spike. Spike's eyes widened even more at what he saw. Thorax's face was painted with every kind of emotion out there; Anger, Sadness, Hurt, Betrayal, and many more that Spike couldn't even recognize. Thorax took a step forward, and made his way towards the baby dragon.

"Tell me Spike" Thorax began anger building up in his voice" If you where really sorry, than why did you do it in the first place?"

Spike didn't know what to say. He hadn't thought much about about it, he just thought more on the apology than ever.

"Let me repeat myself, why did you do it? What did I do to you to make you betray me like that?" Thorax asked

Spike looked over at the Changeling in front of him. Thorax's angry gaze was now replaced with one of complete sadness. Thorax spoke again.

"Are you ashamed of the fact that i'm your friend Spike? Is that the reason why? Is it because I'm a Changeling?" Thorax asked with tears streaming down his face. Spike was about to answer but was interrupted with Thorax yelling out

"I thought you actually cared about me and loved me! You showed me around the Chrystal Empire, you offered me friendship when no pony else would give it to me, you gave me a reason to live. But you threw it all away, our friendship, our love, everything all for..." Thorax paused. " Oh I see now. You where too scared to lose that "glorious and brave" position weren't you? Your whole "Spike the Hero kind of thing was what you really cared about wasn't it?" Thorax spat.

" T... That's not true Thorax." Spike said timidly

"Oh give me a break Spike, I know that's why you did it! Do you really think you could lie to me that easily?" Thorax asked as he huffed in and out in anger " Well guess what, if you really care about your little title, then go. Turn me in. Because I don't want to friends with someone who can't even prove that he cares about me!"

Tears where now flowing down Spike's eyes as Thorax ended his venting with him falling to the ground and breaking down into tears. Spike had seen this kind of thing before, and he was an idiot for not thinking thinking about it before. How Twilight had treated MoonDancer, it was the same thing with him, but a lot worse. Because of him, Thorax now had a heavy bounty on his head and the entire Chrystal Empire was going insane. Spike looked up at Thorax, who was now walking away from him slowly. Spike knew he had to act fast.

" Your right Thorax." Spike said

Thorax stopped in his tracks.

" I wasn't the greatest friend to you, and I'm sorry." Spike was now crying a fountain of tears," You have every right to hate me. My Pride got the best of me only because I let it. I hurt you badly, and now because of me the entire empire in turmoil. I want you know Thorax, that I'm sorry..I'm really really sorry. I really love you Thorax, and if you give me another chance, I promise I'll make it all better between you and me. I promise."

Spike ended the conversation with him falling to his knees and softly crying. Thorax slowly turned around, and saw the weeping dragon before him. Guilt was now starting to fill his body as well.

"Y...You really mean that?" Thorax asked as he took a step further towards Spike

Spike put his claws down from his eyes and looked at Thorax with red, puffy eyes and said

"Y..Yes Thorax, I really mean it."

Thorax, with tears running down his face, immediatly ran up to the dragon and gave him a big hug.

"Spike, I'm sorry I yelled at you like that." Thorax said as he started bawling

"It's okay Thorax, I deserved it. I should have defended you when everypony else was against you." Spike said as a few tears flowed down his face." Can you ever forgive me?"

"Yes Spike, I forgive you , just promise me you won't do that ever again." Thorax said as he pulled the hug in tighter

"I promise Thorax. I love you." said Spike

After a few minutes of hugging, Thorax put Spike back down on the ground.

"Come on Thorax, I'm going to something that I should have done in the first place." said Spike

And with that, Spike grasped Thorax's hoof and lead him towards the Chrystal Empire. At least Spike knew that if he was going to be hated, he knew that he had at least one friend who would always be there for him.

THE END.

Author's Note:

So what did you guys think about this story? I really did feel that the apology scene between Spike and Thorax was one of the down points of the episode. However, I do understand that they didn't have much to really work with ( mostly because of a thirty minute dead line that is). I hope you all enjoyed the story, and I really would like for you all to give me a review down in the comment section below. Tell me what you would have done if you where in that situation. Criticism is welcomed.

Comments ( 5 )

Poor Thorax, it would made it if the episode was a two part or if they try to have them apology than it would been much more better than Spike's song. Not that I hate it but feel like it the song was unnecessary.

A few grammatical errors here and there, but still very well done.

Great work. I have to agree with
7550537 this should have been a two part episode.

This was a nice story. :twilightsmile:
I didn't have any issues with how they handled Spike's apology, however. I felt like Thorax had low self-esteem from the get-go after seeing how he acted towards Spike during their initial meeting. They showed Spike remorseful enough, and Thorax getting angry but still understanding why Spike couldn't stand up for him initially seemed believable.

What I thought they could do better was the ending. Shining Armor and Cadance changed their minds too quickly. I would have liked to have seen Spike and Starlight compare their own transgressions and how they were ultimately forgiven to how Thorax has never done anything evil but it treated like he has all the same.

7551899
Yes you're right. Thorax was starving so would have accepted friendship from anyone that staggered out and found him.
As for the end, it was a bit fast. On one hoof, they had a limited space to work within. On the other hoof, they could have made Cadance and Shining not quite so enthusiastic to accept him. Like maybe have them accept him on Twilight's word, but have audible reluctance in their voices.

To the author, nice custom art on the story though. You should have cover art on more of your stories; never enough cute thorax pics. As for the story, it was an interesting view on the scene in general; I liked it.

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