I'm delicious! Eat me or else!
This is simply my version of the forgiving scene from "The Times they are a Changeling". That's pretty much it, hope you enjoy it. 
Also make sure to give me a review after you read this story. I would really appreciate it. Love you guys.
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Poor Thorax, it would made it if the episode was a two part or if they try to have them apology than it would been much more better than Spike's song. Not that I hate it but feel like it the song was unnecessary.
A few grammatical errors here and there, but still very well done.
Great work. I have to agree with
7550537 this should have been a two part episode.
This was a nice story.
I didn't have any issues with how they handled Spike's apology, however. I felt like Thorax had low self-esteem from the get-go after seeing how he acted towards Spike during their initial meeting. They showed Spike remorseful enough, and Thorax getting angry but still understanding why Spike couldn't stand up for him initially seemed believable.
What I thought they could do better was the ending. Shining Armor and Cadance changed their minds too quickly. I would have liked to have seen Spike and Starlight compare their own transgressions and how they were ultimately forgiven to how Thorax has never done anything evil but it treated like he has all the same.
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Yes you're right. Thorax was starving so would have accepted friendship from anyone that staggered out and found him.
As for the end, it was a bit fast. On one hoof, they had a limited space to work within. On the other hoof, they could have made Cadance and Shining not quite so enthusiastic to accept him. Like maybe have them accept him on Twilight's word, but have audible reluctance in their voices.
To the author, nice custom art on the story though. You should have cover art on more of your stories; never enough cute thorax pics. As for the story, it was an interesting view on the scene in general; I liked it.