Even though Spike was raised in the land of ponies he never truly considered himself an outsider, but sometimes Spike can't help but wonder where he came from. Now he's met someone he hopes can give him answers. but can they?
When Twilight Sparkle's Ascension has an unanticipated side effect, the newest princess and her friends must help a second Twilight adjust to her new world...though the mind inside her has a secret that would surprise her new friends.
When a dimension hopping shape shifter is brought into Equestria against his will, he must learn to live among its inhabitants without corrupting them or their world.
Well, next pamphlet sized chapter is here. I think ill start wrighting down ideas for more chapters when I think of them. Then I can write longer chapters and not feel like an ass! yay me!!!
Then just include more points, be they "extras" or just more of the plot. With a story like yours, I probably would have combined most of the chapters into one fat one (and added more to the end.) Idk how long your story is but i've seen a few that are only 1 chapter. Though i understand you may not have the time to do extensive chapters. so just do what you do
Story elements first noticed: - Main character is a brony - Main character wonders about ponies before they actually show up - Twilight's fault for teleporting her friends to Earth
I like where this is going keep it up.
not bad
Holy crap, 2 GOOD comments????????????????????? Thats a first for me
WHEN WILL YOU CONTINUE?!?!
AAAHHHHH!!! I'M SORRY!!!! ILL WORK ON IT NOW!!!!! JUST DON'T TURN ME INTO CUPCAKES!!!
on a lighter note do people actually like this?
OK SOMETHING IS UP!!! DONT YELL AT ME!!!!!
on a lighter note, people with OCD, love me.
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Unless you've read it already don't get your hopes up, it's nothing great.
Also, I won't be able to get the other chapter out tonight. So ill have to make up for it by making an extra long chapter tomorrow.
iz pretty good. silly. sorta feels like a cheezy anime.
i'd like to see more
I THOUGHT PINKIE WOULD GO NUTS! Still good enough chapter.
Huh, people actually like this? Damn. I guess I have something I need to stay with, don't I?
1145418 Yes you do. NOW MOAR!
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AAHHHH!!! OK!! IM WORKING ON IT NOW!!!!
1149398 yay
Well, next pamphlet sized chapter is here. I think ill start wrighting down ideas for more chapters when I think of them. Then I can write longer chapters and not feel like an ass! yay me!!!
You don't have to extend a story beyond what you intended.....just don't shorten it anymore....at all....
I'm starting to like Ben more and more.
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I HATE making short chapters, but I have a problem with getting the point across to quickly.
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Lol
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Then just include more points, be they "extras" or just more of the plot. With a story like yours, I probably would have combined most of the chapters into one fat one (and added more to the end.) Idk how long your story is but i've seen a few that are only 1 chapter. Though i understand you may not have the time to do extensive chapters. so just do what you do
OH SHIT!!!! LESSON ZERO?!
Story elements first noticed:
- Main character is a brony
- Main character wonders about ponies before they actually show up
- Twilight's fault for teleporting her friends to Earth
Yep, these are the markings of a grade A story.
>MFW Lesson Zero
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Shit just got serious
Incase anybody actually ends up reading this, please thumbs up or down or something so I can get feedback? Please?
I mean, come on, it has over 400 views and 12 people thumbed it
Just, please?
Of course Ben would just shout that!
I love Ben so much!
I kinda like the idea of the CMC in an apocalyptic world. But the series is a good idea too. I say do both!
No knowledge on BronyCon, sorry.
Dickhead LOL
*pokemon fight theme*
Oh.....SHIT!
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Lol, would it be safe to assume you like the story?
1665813 I LOVE it dude!
Oh no...
Wait if 1 of the Mane 6 found out they are from a tv show that could mean... TIME PARADOX!!!!!!!
Note to self NEVER GIVE PINKIE PIE COFFIE
OH GOD I COULD FEEL A TIME PARADOX COMMING EVREYPONY RUN FOR YOUR LIVE
1165352 OH GOD LESSON ZERO... THE TIME PARADOX IS STARTING TO BEGIN RUN FOR IT
YOU DARE MAKE FLUTTERSHY CRY YOU MUST PAY (eyes change from brown to red) INTO THE RIFT WITH YOU MORTAL
So if his parents saw the mane 6 that would mean... TIME PARADOX
Ah Crapbaskets (feels the fabric of the space-time continuum ripping apart)
Ah Crapbaskets