Ponies in the Storm

by Ryanjri

Ponchos

Okay, another short chapter, I know I said it would be long, but a lot came up today, like a lot more than originally planned. So, here is this... thing... tell me what ya think?

After a minute or so of recap, I pulled my brother to the side while the ponies talked amongst them
selves.
"Okay, no matter what, no questions about anything to obvious. I'm not sure if they
know they are part of a T.V. show, and I don't want some sort of cross-reality thing
to make them explode or something."
"Awe, ok."

Me and Ben went back into the living room and noticed that Twilight and Rarity
have come back down from upstairs.

I sat down on the floor and my brother leaned against the wall. I figured that
there had to be some subtle way of figuring out if they knew. I thought about
just asking some normal questions and easing into the idea to maybe get them to
say something about it. Ya, that should work.

"So, how's Ponyville?"

I hate him so much.

"Okay, Ah think that's about it." Applejack said, walking towards us.
"Now, you tell us how y'all know about us and Ponyville right now."

I was sweating furiously. My heart was beating at speeds that would put
bullet train to shame. I figured I could pull this together. I just needed
to choose the right words. One slip of the tongue, and the pastel colored ponies
might be painting the room with pastel colored body parts.

"Ummmmm"
Smooth.

"Ummm nothin, I wanna know to!" Rainbow Dash seemed to be getting
angry too.

"OK, but, you will probably not like then answer."

I could hear Rarity whispering something about inter-dimensional cameras to
Fluttershy. I just kinda looked at her with a confused look on my face. She
suddenly became very interested in her hooves.

"Umm, it might be better if I just show you." As I walked over to the TV to
turn it on.

I whispered to my brother as I walked past him.
"Go get some ponchos, just encase." He nodded and took off towards the hall closet.

Ok, ive been trying to think of things to do to prolong the end. However, I could just wrap it up in a few more chapters and work on the next story in what I guess is considered a story. Tell me what you think I should do.

Comments

[Ryanjri]

Well, next pamphlet sized chapter is here. I think ill start wrighting down ideas for more chapters when I think of them. Then I can write longer chapters and not feel like an ass! yay me!!!

[CEverw00d]

You don't have to extend a story beyond what you intended.....just don't shorten it anymore....at all....

[JDPrime22]

I'm starting to like Ben more and more.

[Ryanjri]

1157959
I HATE making short chapters, but I have a problem with getting the point across to quickly.

1157986
Lol

[CEverw00d]

1158108

Then just include more points, be they "extras" or just more of the plot. With a story like yours, I probably would have combined most of the chapters into one fat one (and added more to the end.) Idk how long your story is but i've seen a few that are only 1 chapter. Though i understand you may not have the time to do extensive chapters. so just do what you do

[DragonEmeraldKeyBladerXZ]

OH GOD I COULD FEEL A TIME PARADOX COMMING EVREYPONY RUN FOR YOUR LIVE