Dash seeks help from Fluttershy over a situation she has got. She quite literally has a lizard riding her back.
This is a simple short story I made in the attempt to not use the word "said" in any part of it. I felt a need to do that. 
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Why?
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Another had asked me for an alternative to using "He said," or "She said" in a sentence with some dialogue in it.
Shortly after reading his request, this story quickly formed in my mind, and I felt the need to get it written out as I had it in thought.
Plus, despite it being good grammar and all that, I never did like seeing "he/she said" in a sentence. It to me can look too repetitious, even if it is being used correctly. It is not bad to use it, but for some like me can become a bit of an eye-sore to see it used a lot.
I know, I did look into it, and by those "who know" for any attributives simple is better, and that means using "said", and not trying to skip around using it when needed.
If I do use it myself, I like to use it sparingly. I thought writing this story that just came to me would be some OK practice for me, and an OK non-pro example for the one who asked me about it on what I would do to try and avoid using "said" anywhere.
Hope this answers your question.
Oh' I don't pretend to be one who knows good writing skills. My methods I know are not always proper, and not the best to learn from to gain true and good writing skills.
What I have put down in this story is what a Pro writer might call a "Busy Attributive" way of writing, and not something one should be doing within their writing. So I am in the wrong with this story in how I written it I guess.
What such a Pro is suggesting is wrong with it is not mixing an action with any dialogue, unless it is directly relative to how the words are being spoken within a sentence with any dialogue in it.
I am still learning myself, and hardly good at it yet.