A single act of carelessness ignites the demise of Carousel Boutique, but an act of generosity between friends sparks the beginning of something much, much more: an existential crisis, for one. Melodramatically Rarijack.
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This is very nice. You have a knack for description here, and the characterization feels believable. I'll be watching this one for updates.
Wow. The characterization is spot on in this. Awesome job.
You've got the characters down perfectly, so good job
Definitely tracking this one.
goin on my favorites
This is good! Can't wait for more.
This is why homeowners are required to purchase insurance. I'm sure when the money comes in that Carousel Boutique 2 will be even more fantastic. Sometimes, getting rid of the old is the best sort of inspiration.
Blimey! The characterization (much as everyone else has stated) is spot-on. Well, at least for Rarity and Applejack. I can't really say anything about the others, as we haven't truly seen that much of them yet. But, what we HAVE seen is more than enough for me to come back to! I await the next chapter with bated breath...
Awesome first chapter. This may not be the first story to use the "hurt and comfort after a house fire" concept but it's very well handled and entertaining. The characterizations were spot on too. The humor struck me as a little odd though but I guess that's inescapable seeing as it's in the middle of a tragedy. If Rarity did what I think she did at the end, I am really looking forward to the next chapter.
Also, "Chicoltgo" is kind of a forced pun. I'd make another suggestion but I've been trying to come up with a ponified name for my home city for months now with no luck. I'm pretty sure it's impossible.
That was an interesting exchange. Seems those two are dancing around something eh? Anyway, very nice chapter. Hope the next update don't take as long.
It's about time!
That was beautiful, particular Applejacks thoughts, my heart tightened while reading her lovelorn state. You really got a knack for writing about unrequited hidden feelings, it reached me.
I can't wait for an update, keep up the good work!
More, please.
I am so glad to see this has updated, and with just as high of quality as the first chapter. I do hope the next chapter comes more quickly, but please do not feel like you need to rush. Some things are worth the wait.
The basic premise of this story isn't very complicated. It is the way you write it, the very believable way you portray the emotions of the characters that really makes this shine. Keep writing. You do it so well.
what can I say...This is probaly the best rarjack I've read from this site...Keep it up
Glad to see this updated! Your characterizations and dialogue are dead on, and the interplay between the characters is a treat. Really looking forward to more!
...I was just thinking about this today, and the title, and a few hints in the story, and... I think I just realized there's going to be a plot twist coming, and I think I know what it is.
Are you quiting this? If so, please say so.