Ravaged by a war that ended civilization, Equestria is now nothing more than a desolate wasteland. The city of Trottingham is no exception. During the war it served as a beacon of peace to its citizens, taking in refugees from both sides. Now it serves as the embodiment of the Wasteland. Trottingham is now home to some of the most violent gangs in the Wasteland. But even the most fearsome of gangs don't even come close to the irradiated monstrosities that call Trottingham home. Swept up in an idealistic crusade to fight ‘the good fight’ one pegasus must learn if fighting is really the best way to 'fight' the good fight.
Chapters (1)
After reading FOE and PH I decided to try my hand at writing a FOE fic. I did some research and tried my best to write something that hasn't already been done but there are so many fics I couldn't read them all. So if I copied anyone's idea I apologize ahead of time. Any and all feedback is welcome (especially if you dislike the story please tell me why)!
775567 Good luck with your fic
Same thing happened to me. After reading the original and PH I had my own little story bouncing around my brain, so I had to get it out. I'm gonna check this out later today. (Currently wrapping up the next chapter for my Hitman crossover) Again good luck and remember, Have fun with it! 
775567 I think you're good. For all of the FO:E spinoffs I've seen, not one of them has been an exact carbon copy concept. I'll bookmark your story because I believe it has an interesting concept. I myself believe in the application of necessary force, so a story when a warrior struggles against the very philosophy of pacifism is very appealing.
So, I've only had the chance to skim through the first few paragraphs (not enough time to read, unfortunatly) and I have to say it: I'm impressed. There's a few errors - "pegasi.The Sergeant" and "Manehattan didn’t see it, neither did Cloudsdale" (I think that needs a semi-colon, but don't quote me. Even if it is in quotes), but from what I can tell so far they're isolated rather than systamtic errors.
Your characters seem interesting enough (again: didn't read all of it, so I can't give a full review right now), and from what I can guess/predict, there's going to be some reality adjustment coming up soon. That's intersting (to me, at least) and I more than look forwards to seeing where you take it, whatever the hell that may mean.
Also, seeing as none of the usual crowd seems to have dropped by, I'd suggest introducing yourself here: or the FO:E side-story communtiy thingy page as it's also known. They'll probably be able to help you out with whether or not your plot's unique/fufil your bizzare FO:E chat quota for the day.
Anyway, I'll be back later on when I have time to both read and comment. Bye for now
Edit: Okay, quick glance through and I've one more thing to add. Your spacing's drift everywhere in this; I'd watch that.
Welcome to the FoE sidefic herd
That was a strong first chapter, and I must say, I do like Lucid's character
Keep it up 
(By the way, if you happen to drop by the compilation document that 780204 mentioned, my name's Nathan in the chat
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Thanks for all the helpful feedback everyone. Glad to see you guys like it
So I finished reading and I'm in. I'm throwing all my like at this story. That scene with the foal was fucking brutal. Keep up the good work.
783528 second chapters already written and in final editing stages. I expect it to be up within the next few days. Same with the third chapter which is expected to make an appearance sometime near next weekend.
780204 Right. I am back (and responding to myself, aparently.)
This was a strong openning chapter; I liked it. Your characters are well defined, you did a good job of making them weak but not powerless (ie, not OP but not its opposite either) and it'll be damn interesting to see how you pull off a FOE fic with a nearly pacifistic main character. That's a meaty concept to be basing a fic around, and that's putting aside anything else you decide to weave into this.
Drawbacks: you've got some mechanical issues, mainly around your use of commas. Like here "except for Steelwing ; he was starting to doze off" or here "Steel is the most loyal pony I know either ';' or ':' he wouldn’t abandon the Enclave" or here "It’s really simple : we go down there, give the friendly ponies food, water, medical supplies, make nice you could go for an ';', but a ', and' or other conjunction might serve you better then come back." I'm not good enough to spot all of them, but I can certainly tell there's a problem.
Another thing that really jumped out at me was this: "His mouth curled into a frown, “you’re shaking." Technically, the part that preceeds the speech counts as a sentence in its own right. In other words, it should end with a full stop (period) and the part in "" should begin with caps.
There's some other kinks that'd need weeding out ("Are you going somewhere?.”), but apart from that, this was a strong entry into the FOE sidefic pool; one of the strongest I've seen, actually. Keep it up
785998 Thanks for the feedback. My editors and I tried our best to spot all the grammatical errors, but at almost 12k words it's hard to nab them all. As for the "?." part that's more than likely the cause of me rewriting a part and forgetting to delete the period. At least half of the paragraphs have been rewritten at least once.
Just an update: Chapter 2 has been delayed. The kind folks over at the Fallout Equestria side story page have given me a lot of ideas to better the second chapter. It'll take a while to implement and edit them, but I promise it's worth the wait.
Interesting, just get that second chapter out soon, will you
love it.
You have earned a folower! i like where this is going so far!
who the thumbed this down?
I hope they have a motor function disability... :(
otherwise something is very very wrong with this otherwise beautiful picture.
please keep writing