I love the ponies of Equestria talking like bronies about best princess and the like. Like they have underground betting rings for the princesses moves...
"Nah, man," the fat pony said, pushing his glass up higher on his pimple-covered face. "Luna would totally beat Celestia in a fight."
"Nuh-uh," his lanky friend said, shaking his head. "Celestia's already defeated Luna once, and she can do it again!"
"First of all, that was Nightmare Moon," the first colt huffs, "and secondly, she could only defeat Nightmare Moon with the Elements of Harmony, which she no longer has. Luna would totally win now."
"No way!"
"Yes way! She just has to block Celestia's sun with her moon and she wins!"
"Luna would never do that though. It's against her character."
"Are you kidding me? Cadance could beat the two of them easily!" a third colt speaks up. "She could use her powers as the Princess of Love to defeat both of them by making them make out with each other!"
Hmm, no offense or anything, and I still really enjoyed this chapter, but I noticed that there were a few more grammar mistakes and spelling errors than usual. At least during the first part anyway.
And why do I get the feeling that near the end of the story someone's gonna walk in on those two gettin' freaky?
Hmm, no offense or anything, and I still really enjoyed this chapter, but I noticed that there were a few more grammar mistakes and spelling errors than usual. At least during the first part anyway.
Most likely. I wrote this chapter this afternoon after I had to go get an ingrown toenail ripped out. Wasn't working at 100% mental capacity.
Yeesh. Hope your doing alright now brother, and trust me, I know how painful toe-related injuries can be. I once had a puss-filled infection in my big toe and when it popped, which was pretty painful in and of itself, I had to jam a small piece of soap into the wound to stop the bleeding and disinfect everything else.
Surprisingly after a while it didn't hurt nearly as much as when it was still unpopped. The magic of soap I guess.
7205810 And speaking of ingrown toenails, I've had one of those, didn't get it removed for about a week, of course that was after I lugged up 40/60 pound boxes of junk up four flights of stairs...
7205958 Oooo... oooow, I can't imagine having one for that long. Good thing you got it ripped out, those sting like a bitch when you hit em just right.
Thing is now with all the fiction I've read with Pegasi in it. I have started having the same words of *pomf Stupid wings* so many times that I think my first oc should've been a Pegasus instead of a unicorn. But can't complain.
So cute.
I giggle-snorted. I am not proud of it, but I did it.
Well we got 1000 likes before the end of the week.
What now MadMax? What are you gonna do? When we cum for you?
Yay new chapter :)
things are about to get %20 sexier hue hue hue
Oh unholy fuck I laughed too much at that last bit
Loved the ending line. Genius man!
"I" know my royalty. And "colon.
I love the ponies of Equestria talking like bronies about best princess and the like. Like they have underground betting rings for the princesses moves...
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Hmm, no offense or anything, and I still really enjoyed this chapter, but I noticed that there were a few more grammar mistakes and spelling errors than usual. At least during the first part anyway.
And why do I get the feeling that near the end of the story someone's gonna walk in on those two gettin' freaky?
7205780 do not make light of the love magics: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/314187/18/awful-lot-of-coffee-in-equestria/the-power-of-love-is-actually-a-terrifying-thing
s will mess you up hardcore
actually twilight would win because she can wield the elements of harmony now
Another great chapter. I'm so nervousited for more.
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Most likely. I wrote this chapter this afternoon after I had to go get an ingrown toenail ripped out. Wasn't working at 100% mental capacity.
After reading the chapter this is the only thing that came to my mind:
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I'm sorta half-expecting Velvet to try and ship Twilight and the protagonist in one of the following chapters... and then offer a threesome.
Now that brings with it some disturbing mental imagery I didn't need.
Wow, this is becoming horror, and now comes my favorite part of these kind of fics, the clop for the sake of clopping :)
DIS BITCH SANDIER THAN THE FUCKING SAHARA DEAR GOD
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Like a hoard of tiny bat ponies flying and shrieking out of her vagina?
A clop story with a comparably great storyline.
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>>MadMaxtheBlack
Yeesh. Hope your doing alright now brother, and trust me, I know how painful toe-related injuries can be. I once had a puss-filled infection in my big toe and when it popped, which was pretty painful in and of itself, I had to jam a small piece of soap into the wound to stop the bleeding and disinfect everything else.
Surprisingly after a while it didn't hurt nearly as much as when it was still unpopped. The magic of soap I guess.
7205677 no bad
7205810 I feel your pain. I had the same thing done a couple of months ago...
not fun...
I'm curious as to this as well, why would we Velvet? hohohoh
Awesome job man, awesome job!
And we reached 1K likes... what are you gonna do now?
7205810 And speaking of ingrown toenails, I've had one of those, didn't get it removed for about a week, of course that was after I lugged up 40/60 pound boxes of junk up four flights of stairs...
You can imagine how painful that might of been.
7205946 Yeah, I've had this one since January.
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Oooo... oooow, I can't imagine having one for that long.
Good thing you got it ripped out, those sting like a bitch when you hit em just right.
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hmmmm... looks like the next few chapters are gonna be VERY interesting...
Also:
Want, WAAAAAAAAAANNNNT
... god damn it, Max-senpai...
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I had no idea that that the term was actually from the Furry fandom. Alright then. It's new to me but whatever.
And I'm digging some of those synonyms. Just thinking of the phrase "Smash a brown spider with a hammer" makes me laugh.
1K likes... not enough, need moar
Heheh. Totally worth the slap indeed.
So, friends with benefits of a hot Milf. The fucking teenage dream. Just don't be making anymore Sparkles.
1K likes, and gaining the legendary Puss' personal attention. Kudos to you, good sir!
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Which one? Kanashi Panda made dozens of Velvet art. And most of it are incest. Like that teenage pregnant one.
The only issue I have with this story is the nosebleeds.
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Quite a lot of this going on.
Also... his gift is getting through the wrapping eh? Guess he'll need to go and 'repack' it.
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Dude needs an editor. If it got me to the story any earlier, I'd totally be the editor.
Plus, more chance to get reading about that Velvet booty ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)..
And the comedy/banter between intimate friends starts.
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I actually self-edit, better story quality without actually having to drastically change the prose.
Problem is the time to completion tho...
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Have you met most teenagers? That's how the majority of them act.
7206492 Any more, in the past most were better behaved but any more? NO!
Best lines I've read in a while, doesn't help that he's also right.
Thing is now with all the fiction I've read with Pegasi in it. I have started having the same words of *pomf Stupid wings* so many times that I think my first oc should've been a Pegasus instead of a unicorn. But can't complain.
7206069 I had no clue what you were talking about so I had to look it up. Hot damn! What have I been missing out on?
7206247 I write each chapter in like a day. There's no time for editors, unless you want each chapter to take a week instead.
Why would we need to get Luna a present if it’s Twilight’s birthday?” you ask.
That's so full of win.
Commence read.
Good mix of humor.
7206653 1100 LIKES!! ARE YOU HAPPY?
You did this to me
Kek
Luna is best princess so why buy Twi a gift?
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Just a friendly reminder; I'm just here to read the articles. Yessir. And the ads. Wonderful ads. The plot is nice, too.
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7206069 I need a link.
NOW.
If you needed help cleaning cobwebs and bats out of the belfry, WHY DON'T YOU BUY A FUCKING VACUUM CLEANER!? THIS STORY MAKES NO SENSE!