She's lonely, she's tipsy, he's young and hormonal, that incident with the carriage has jump started her instincts, meaning they can influence her actions more than they normally would... and this is a clopfic.
Oh yeah, this night is gonna get soooo much better.
I'll admit that this is definitely not turning out how I expected it to. In a really, REALLY good way.
At first glance, the description of this story turned me away for a bit. It sounded like it would just be another mindless clop fic, which, while those aren't exactly bad per se—I kind of wanted something more than that. And I'm liking what you've written so far, as it IS something more than a mindless clop fic. It's all really well written, and the relationship building between Twilight Velvet and me the colt is an interesting one.
Looking forward to seeing more of what you've got in store.
*<>* MOAR!!! ~be patient Gyoza ...all good things come to those who wait ... *<>* But I want it NOW!!! ~ Gyoza if you keep getting worked up like that your going to blow your head gasket and turbos again ...ease to an idle would ya
Surely, I can't be the only one who pays more attention to it than the actual fic. I mean, look at Velvet's ass! It's the kind of ass that's perfect for shoving your face into!
7190403 Actually a cinema is a group of theaters all in one building. When you go to a cinema you actually watch the film in one of the theaters there.
Funny enough, the bottom of the image has a tendency to be a human one, is like if you cut both parts you see a difference in perspective. Also, a book cannot be judged by its cover, but what attracts people is that in the end. Is the only way you can call to the people to read your story.
Ya know, I didn't think I was going to like this story as much as I do. And it's not because I'm waiting for the, er, racy parts, no. It's because I actually like what you have done with the characters and I like the story. (By "I like the story," I mean I like the way the story is going.)
7191822 *Looks at description* "Takes place in a universe where Night Light died shortly after Twilight was born."
While I agree that the Alternate Universe tag may be appropriate for this story, you can't really be shocked that Night Light is dead when it's stated right there in the description. Plus Alternate Universe is generally only used for stories that greatly diverge from the canon of the show. All we know that's different so far is that Night Light died—aside from that, we don't really have anything else.
Would you believe I didn't read the description the whole way... just enough to know that this story was going to involve sexy times with Twilight Velvet.
I am enjoying this story as well as it makes an excuse for talking to myself when I read the parts with the teenager was either talking or doing a moan...I read this in school a certain person always does a girlish moan in class then makes all of the class laugh even my teacher.
very nice :)
Power Ponies: Disharmony War, I see what you did there. Another great chapter, can't wait for the next one.
Drunk adult and hormonal teen in a sex tagged story? What could go wrong?: ^)
This is a very nice chapter keep up a good work update soon
She's lonely, she's tipsy, he's young and hormonal, that incident with the carriage has jump started her instincts, meaning they can influence her actions more than they normally would... and this is a clopfic.
Oh yeah, this night is gonna get soooo much better.
Booty had me like:
images6.fanpop.com/image/answers/3483000/3483040_1394714688601.76res_500_281.jpg
And for good measure:
images5.fanpop.com/image/answers/2432000/2432987_1329094311871.74res_500_297.jpg
.... and in other news, I'd better read the rest of this chapter in the bathroom for.... FOR SCIENCE!!! :twilight oops:
EDIT:
GOD DAMN IT MAX!!!!
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MURPHY'S LAW MAN!!!
FUN FACT: popcorn must be eaten messily and in large quantity's never one at a time a quote i live by
Commence read.
A chaotic morning.
Not sure why I was expecting something in the theater.
Nevertheless, nice moments to be had.
Just a quick one bugged me.
7188690 tmnt?
Feelings aren't the only things that are growing, evidently.
7188780 indeed fine sir.
your
Evil typos must be eradicated!
Yes... I reiterate I am only here for the typos... and not the plot.
Good solid story that actually makes sense, I like it. Gladly waiting for next chapter.
Really enjoyed the story. Very insipring too for a teen and an adult in something like this. Stay Awesome and hope you upload often!
Story gets better and better!
Hahaha, awesome chapter man, very different from most I've seen, nicely done!
7188690 I feel like I saw that in a movie
Sweet.
Love it, keep up the awesome work!
Great chapter Max!
I'll admit that this is definitely not turning out how I expected it to. In a really, REALLY good way.
At first glance, the description of this story turned me away for a bit. It sounded like it would just be another mindless clop fic, which, while those aren't exactly bad per se—I kind of wanted something more than that. And I'm liking what you've written so far, as it IS something more than a mindless clop fic. It's all really well written, and the relationship building between Twilight Velvet and
methe colt is an interesting one.Looking forward to seeing more of what you've got in store.
Very nice chapter and good luck with your finals
Velvet is drinking all that on purpose. Clever cougar. Or whatever equivalent ponies have
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I don't know where you're from, but I have never really heard someone be so keen on stating the difference between the two.
Is it just me or is velvet starting to get a little kinky?
This story reminds me ofSummer on Fire
7190403 its a "movie" theater
*<>* MOAR!!!
~be patient Gyoza ...all good things come to those who wait ...
*<>* But I want it NOW!!!
~ Gyoza if you keep getting worked up like that your going to blow your head gasket and turbos again ...ease to an idle would ya
You made a poor coverart choice.
Surely, I can't be the only one who pays more attention to it than the actual fic. I mean, look at Velvet's ass! It's the kind of ass that's perfect for shoving your face into!
7190403
Actually a cinema is a group of theaters all in one building.
When you go to a cinema you actually watch the film in one of the theaters there.
7190403
7191088 If it makes you click on the story, then the cover art is doing its job.
7188690 You are a monster among men.
7191503 how so?
7191254
Funny enough, the bottom of the image has a tendency to be a human one, is like if you cut both parts you see a difference in perspective.
Also, a book cannot be judged by its cover, but what attracts people is that in the end. Is the only way you can call to the people to read your story.
Sooooo, yeah its doing its job
Are we entertained? YEAH!!!!!!!!
Ya know, I didn't think I was going to like this story as much as I do. And it's not because I'm waiting for the, er, racy parts, no. It's because I actually like what you have done with the characters and I like the story. (By "I like the story," I mean I like the way the story is going.)
7190484 when you make a deal with me I leave a piece of my soul in you!!!
7191822 *Looks at description*
"Takes place in a universe where Night Light died shortly after Twilight was born."
While I agree that the Alternate Universe tag may be appropriate for this story, you can't really be shocked that Night Light is dead when it's stated right there in the description. Plus Alternate Universe is generally only used for stories that greatly diverge from the canon of the show. All we know that's different so far is that Night Light died—aside from that, we don't really have anything else.
7191846
Would you believe I didn't read the description the whole way... just enough to know that this story was going to involve sexy times with Twilight Velvet.
...
no
...
7191924 m.popkey.co/965022/X15JJ.gif
7191965 oh now i'm perfectly okay with THAT kind of extra butter. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
7191891 Can't say I really blame you.
I think that "feelings" aren't the only thing that will be growing... And I'm okay with that.
7191965
...
...
...Dafuq?
7191529 You enjoy each kernel seperately, donglord.
7190559 stable-robber?
I am enjoying this story as well as it makes an excuse for talking to myself when I read the parts with the teenager was either talking or doing a moan...I read this in school a certain person always does a girlish moan in class then makes all of the class laugh even my teacher.
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No problem, friend