A Minor Mistake

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Grumpy Goat's latest client is DEAD. A zombie, to be precise. It has even brought a mob that is chasing it! Good thing that Grumpy's cave entrance is Iron plate! What does a zombie want and why did it come to Grumpy?

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Seraphem #1 · Feb 24th, 2016 · · ·

“He was caught at the disturbed grave and the mob thinks that YOU raised him from that grave! Isn't that hilarious?”

And yet... yeah can't blame him for finding it funny. Gotta expect someone like him to have a rather morbid sense of humor.

'Make ME a monster to terrify the ones that have been teasing me.'

also

You ALWAYS parse every sentence and word of any requests like this to make sure they can't be turned around to bite you in the ass like that.

Well, that was a fun little story. Nothing really much to say about it beyond that. An overall solid, entertaining little grumpy Goat issue. Did like the semi-twist of "He screwed up the instructions and did the ritual the right way by mistake, but screwed himself over on poor wording" thing, that.. was very nice. Granted Litch's "he's always messing up things" does kind of smack into "Show don't tell" issues, but for such a short story, not a huge deal. Also, mistaking a 3 for an 8 is a bit of a stretch. If we assume these are hoof/mouth/horn written rather then printed, interchanging a 4 and 9 would feel a lot easier, I know I have trouble all the time with that, especially with my own handwriting. But realtivly minor nitpicks.

Overall, fun little addition to Grumpy's Tales, nothing ZOMG amazing, but fairly solid all around. Good little message to it, just, really enjoyed it.