Today stated out like any other day, except it wasn't... Reznov, a New York State worker charged with maintaining several parks and roadsides, was just getting ready to go home for the night when something completely unbelievable happens. Two people fall into the back of his truck and his entire life is turned upside down.
Note: i also posted this on FanFiction dot net but i wanted to have it here due to ease of access. Also there will be certain things i wanted to do but couldn't. I will be doing a side story that i will take suggestions on so if you have any ideas send them my way and i will cite you at the beginning of chapters with your ideas in them.
Chapters (5)
What is this a crossover of?
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It would be Hellsing Ultimate, a very good anime if i say so myself... unless you aren't a fan of rivers of blood and body parts.
I have to admit I skipped pretty much of this chapter, mostly because sometimes I feel like the background part isn´t really needed in some storys, or isn´t impotant anymore later. However sometimes I just don´t feel like to read the part how they got there, even the convention part in some Displaced story get´s boring, but that´s not their fault I guess.
Well no hard feelings for that chapter, but I´m not that much into military stuff anyway, and if I read the parts I actually have read correctly, it was mostly about that.
while I don´t think they really need to tell them about the show, I like it that he at least only want to tell her about it. I somehow like the storys, where the Human even doesn´t know about MLP.
He probably should start to befriend her first, before asking that question. It looks like it happens to fast, even if he hast that connection with her, but part of me is also okay with it happening like that.
Well not bad so far, I like this chapter a bit more already, and I always react a bit different at Night.
I like the part with the adoption too, but if he started to bond with her first, the adoption could have felt a bit more special maybe, but like I said I´m tired, so I don´t take myself 100% seriously, more 75%
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im glad to see someone liking what im writing, keep in mind though this is my first shot at writing so i do need to work on it a bit. thanks for the feedback though, it's greatly appreciated.
6855167 the first chapter gives the reader an intro for Reznov and sets up a side story i pan on writing. the 'military' guys in the first chapter are going to a different equestria, one ruled by evil and where Celestia and Luna never became Princesses.
I have mixed fellings about it, but right now even if I´m tired, it doesn´t seems to bad.
Nothing against it, but it seems a little bit strange to have it in this story. Right now he is a military vampire Soldier thing?4
I read more tomorrow, I don´t have the time for the whole thing tonight. In a way I really like to read it, but at the same time it has his strange side.
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Reznov isn't military, he just received training to use his powers effectively to defend himself. and in the human world he came from Vampires were being hunted along side other mythical beings that may or may not appear in the story. also as a side note, the phone being linked back to earth wasnt my idea... a fellow author on fanfiction.net gave me the idea in a conversation about a month before i started writing. also feel free to point out and typos or grammar mistakes.
Mybe you should add a reaction from Rarity there?, so that we see that she is tacken aback, or reall sorry?
Not sure why the part with his wings, wanted me to think about Super Man, I guess I just have a day, where I can´t take it very serious.
I miss some respond from a few characters at some points, I think you should add some sort of reaction here, and there.
That doesn´t really makes it better for me, but something like that isn´t that bad anymore, after I have seen it so often. I just don´t get it why they always have to tell them about the show, do they want an easy start for the story?
Not sure how much I like it, but Scootaloo being his new adoptive daugther, keeps me interessted enough.