Blaze's Journey of Redemtion

by Charon White

After the gala

(This chapter is a place holder until the rewrite is finished.)

"Well this sucks." Blaze said as he saw the castle stop shaking and crowd calming down. After the evacuation all of the guest gathered in the streets of Canterlot. Much to the dismay of any nearby ponies.

Twilight worked her way to the front as she called out to the ponies. "CALM DOWN!" After hearing this the crowd stoping their 'organized chaos and, became a clam orderly crowd. "Thank you! Now we just need to wait for Celestia and she'll tell us what went wrong." Sure enough Celestia arrived.

"Do not worry ponies! A few support beams broke within the castle causing it to shake. But worry not, they are being replaced as we speak." Celestia yelled into the crowd.

After Celestia finished speaking the ponies dispersed and left for their homes. "Thank you for that Celestia. I appreciate it."

"Your welcome Twilight!" Celestia then saw Blaze was still with her. An idea clicked in her head. She wanted Blaze to meet new ponies and Twilight wasn't going to be her student for much longer. "Twilight I have one final test for you." Celestia said.

"But I'm still your student for two more years. Why the final test now?" Twilight asked very confused.

"My final assignment is for you to live with Blaze. I've noticed you saw though his alibi and, I want him to meet new ponies. Also you haven't lived with a pony around your age before." Blaze and Twilght looked at her shocked and disgusted.

"What?! Where would you get that idea?" Twilight raised her voice.

"Also why? We just meet and now we're living together! For a test!" Blaze shouted at Celestia.

Celestia let out a sigh. "Okay then no test. But still Twilight let him stay with you. He has nowhere else to go."

Twilight let out a sigh. "Okay, fine." She said reluctantly.

"Thank you Twilight. I am truly sorry for trying to warp this situation." Celestia said trying to damage control the situation.

It's fine princess just please don't make this more than it is." Blaze said. "Don't worry I'll make try to make some friends."

"Thank you Blaze." Celestia said as she watched the two walk off.

Author's Note:

Please destroy this chapter and show no mercy.

Comments

[Misty Moonshine]

Good story in general, try to lengthen up the chapters (1,000) and see what becomes of it. I will be adding onto this soon.

Misty Moonshine

[Charon White]

7042332 THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!!!!!! I've been waiting for a comment like this! Don't worry about the errors I'll fix those up ASAP.

[Misty Moonshine]

7042519 <3

[CrossRedstone]

Well, the best way I can put it is that your story is rushed. If it wasn't for the summary, I wouldn't have been able to make out any context. Maybe give us a little bit more background information on your OC. Write a little bit more about what is actually happening. From my perspective it looks like this: character does this, character talks, character does this, talks, then this happens. Sorry if it comes over a little harsh. Try to write around it a little more. Describe the scenery, the characters, maybe add a bit background characters who are doing something or other.

[Charon White]

7147679 Thank you! I know it's rushed. I mostly wanted to post it. Also thank you for helping me with the imagry. I'll put it to use. When school dies down.

[CrossRedstone]

7147793 no problem. Just posted a story and got three downvotes within the first hour without a comment. Is actually the reason I joined a group, where I found your story.

[Charon White]

7147824 Huh funny.