Average idiot, at your service!
It's Hearth's Warming Eve and all throughout Ponyville, ponies and other creatures are preparing for the big celebration. However, there seems to be a thief among them as things keep turning up missing. Twilight and Pixel head out in hopes to track the bandit while the rest tries to keep things on track for the celebration. However, things take a rather sad turn once they uncover who's behind the stolen treasures during the most important time of the year
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question who the fuck is Pixel
6792464 At first I was so excited to read my first comment for my fimfiction xD. But Pixel, is Pixel Wavelength. One of the Poniverse Mascots. An OC basically
6792881 ah ok just never heard of her cool
My, my, my, thank you sooooooooooooo much for taking the time to put all this together for our little contest! I apologize for taking so long to get around to this; this time of the year is always busy for me as a new semester gets underway. Anyways, I enjoyed this very much. For a first time fic, it's very very clear that there was a lot of passion and heart put into this, and that certainly made it an enjoyable read, let me tell you. I appreciate how much you clearly care about your writing, and trust me, that makes any read in general far more enjoyable for the reader when it's clear that the author truly cares about what they're writing.
I would encourage you, if you continue to write stories on Fimfiction, to definitely work on polishing your writing, because that'll just make it even more enjoyable. Don't be afraid to go to one of the many groups on this site full of editors or proofreaders ready and willing to lend a helping hand to new writers here, they're very helpful and courteous to those who seek their help. One specific thing I will point out that I noticed repeatedly through this fic:
Silver Stream would hesitate before she spoke
You kept using the word 'would' in your prose in a very weird way. Sentences like this should be worded in the past tense, like so: "Silver Stream hesitated before she spoke." That was bugging me more than anything else in the fic, but other than that, this was still very enjoyable on the whole, and I cannot thank you enough again for taking the time to write this! Best of luck with any future writing you might undertake, and feel free to seek mine or others help in the future!
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Thank you so much! And understood. I appreciate your feedback and will take it under heavy consideration from now on.
*winces* Now that you've pointed that out, I am beginning to understand what you mean. Amazing how I'm only noticing now....
Apologies it was a bit frustrating to read due to my errors , but I'll be sure to edit it sometime after the contest is over (if that's okay) to ensure future readers don't encounter the same problem . I'll seek help next time ;)
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Best of luck with your writing.
Oh no worries, it wasn't that distracting.