Obligatory small horse related pun and/or meme.
You know that thing, that funny little idea that the world is a multiverse, where all universes are connected via tendrils of time magic... thingies? Yeah, well, neither does Sheogorath. All he knows is that he grew bored of his time in the Shivering Isles yet again, and decides to go spread a little mischief in a plane of existence he spotted out his cheese room's window. Packing up his cane and beard, he hops in a taxi to said universe. What could go wrong?
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Alrighty, review... Review... I unfortunately have no info on Sheogorath other than his wiki page, which I didn't bother to read all the way, so I can't verify how accurately he is depicted. /shrug. One thing that really bugs me is the tenses of the story- the whole thing is written in the present tense, which grates on me since I'm so used to reading everything in the past tense. The first section seems very choppy, with sudden changes from sentence to sentence with hardly any transitioning, and in my opinion, their conversation seems a little forced and awkward, but then again, I am not familiar with Sheogorath and Paul. Twilight's bit seems pretty good (although
doesn't strike me as something TS would remark, it's really not something worth nitpicking over) I think it's a pretty neat idea of having her magic let her know when someone's at the door- I mean, Ponyville's pretty small, and she'd want to give people personal attention and whatnot, so kudos for that bit. (Also saves installing a doorbell) I also like the note on the doorstep. Overall, the story goes by extremely fast with no real introduction, and pushed the reader immediately into the confrontation and stuff. It's just way too fast to get a sense of, well, anything. /shrug.
This should be good. SHEOGRATH FOREVER!
dead?
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Little bit, just like most of my stories. It's what happens when life takes a priority before creativity.
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I see. so no chance of this being continued?
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Not exactly zero chance, but unlikely for the time being until I find a more stable income.