An End to Ignorance

Mix-up #1 · Nov 16th, 2015 · · · Chapter 1: Reunions ·

Well, it was a good story I am more for the Diaper theme than water sport, the futa was good doe. There is still the problem of having sentences to long or need more punctuation to them. Still I am looking forward to the next chapter.

Tsunogami

Tsunogami #2 · Nov 16th, 2015 · · · Chapter 1: Reunions ·

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6637075 Glad you liked it. I'm sure there are various grammar and spelling mistakes here and there that I did not catch, though I do not see my sentences getting any shorter. I am working toward a masters degree in Geology and in so doing I read and write a good deal of complex sentences, therefore that is the writing style with witch I am comfortable. In fact sometimes I feel I use too many commas already!

Mix-up

Mix-up #3 · Nov 16th, 2015 · · · Chapter 1: Reunions ·

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6638012 Well it just weird when I leasing to on my audio-reader programme that I use. Normally, the sentences that is reads are are about at the same length of sentence as a normal person would be able to say before having to take their breath before fainting, which it not the case with your story. Granted, I leasing to most text at about 10 time normal human speed while I draw, but the principal is still their.

Tsunogami

Tsunogami #4 · Nov 16th, 2015 · · · Chapter 1: Reunions ·

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6639975 Ah, I see, well reading software usually does not do as good of a job of interpreting sentences with the appropriate pauses and inflections as reading it yourself. My stories are meant to be read, not spoken by a computer. That's not to say my structure is perfect but I still wouldn't trust a computer to read it correctly.

Mix-up

Mix-up #5 · Nov 16th, 2015 · · · Chapter 1: Reunions ·

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6640063 It thought the same thing for a while, but I got used to it over time, and to my surprise, even if the software doesn't have any infections while reading, the pauses of the punctuations are good enough to sound almost like that normal human speaking. And, with a little imagination, actually imagine the infections to compensate for it. For most stories that I "read" on this doesn't have any problems with it, for you story it's something special to leasing to. I would say that it actually bad, but it's funny when I hear it. Any way being really bad at writing in general this software has actually helped me a lot in understanding how to make a descent sentence structures even when it comes to English. I hope that it is a good enough explanation for you.

Swarthy Skies

Swarthy Skies #6 · Nov 17th, 2015 · · 1 · Chapter 1: Reunions ·

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Man I'm happy I happened to stumble across this. It's rare to find so many of my niche fetishes and interests all coming together in one place. I am on board with absolutely every fetish mentioned so far and I really love the tenderness and playfullness the characters exude.

Story wise the main appeal to me is Twilight's varied relationships to the other princesses but I'm interested to see what you have in mind regarding the mystery aspect of the story, and that sci-fi tag is making me very curious.

Oh please let there be a clop scene with futa Celestia and diapered Twilight at some point.

Tsunogami

Tsunogami #7 · Nov 18th, 2015 · · · Chapter 1: Reunions ·

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6643050 Very happy to see you are enjoying it! It is a very rare combination of interests, which happens to be one of the main reasons why I am writing it, I couldn't find anyone else to! As to Twilight's relationships I have become tired of all the stories that have Twilight's first time with Celestia/Luna at the primary focus. The problem becomes which story is the most accurate about how that encounter would go? And how early on in their relationship would it happen? For me I would rather only touch on that and leave the details to the reader's imagination instead of trying to accurately describe such an important event. As for the science fiction mystery thing you'll just have to wait and see!

p.s. If I do write a scene between Celestia and Twilight I'll have to think of something rather creative for it. It needs to be able to stand out from the other ones I have read.

marinus18

marinus18 #8 · Feb 27th, 2016 · · · Prologue: The Darkening Skies ·

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One problem that you keep having is that the story is too confusing. Just what is happening and how did Twilight end up there?
You should start at home or give it in a flashback.

Mr Ghostman

Mr Ghostman #9 · Mar 23rd, 2016 · · · Chapter 1: Reunions ·

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I'm not even a huge fan of scat/heavy diaper use fetishes at all yet this chapter turned me on more times than it should.

ValNitak Choas

ValNitak Choas #10 · Mar 30th, 2016 · · · Chapter 1: Reunions ·

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I enjoy diaper play but not to this point yet, I could not help but stay hard during reading it......then again I always though of cadnace as a futa because that would be hwat.....also since twilight is in since a filly among alicorn does the mean she now underage by alicron standers.....also ever on the otherhand, the princess did rape twilight and she was underage........but good story over all I like it...now got to take cold shower

Tsunogami