A new writer trying his hand at writing fanfictions. If you have any notes on my work please leave a comment.
Ever since Moon Star was little he dreamed of being normal. That not possible when your a Gargoyle Pony who lives in a cave and sleeps during the day. Then one day Luna the Princess of the night returns. Maybe she can undo the "gift" and make him regular pony like everyone else.
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What in the holy abomination of fuck is that cover art. The proportions are off by so much.
Liked the story for the superb cover art
That self-insert though. Credit for not using pony creator but I think I would have actually preferred that with a generic alicorn OC.
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Wow so there a musician called Moon Star. I am so sorry. Epic music though.
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Yeah to be perfectly honest this is my first attempt at drawing attempt. I added an orange sweater and hair to give him a distinct appearance. If you have any other ideas to improve the concept tell me. By the way how was the story?
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Ok tell me exactly what's wrong with it.
Okay, I an tell this isn't too good from the description alone. When you have to introduce a new type of species/ability/trait, that means you're trying to make your OC "special". Also, the way you describe him makes him sound "tortured", another fanfiction cliché. Also, your design of "Moon Star" isn't all that appealing. Even Ponymaker would be better to use(not that I'm recommending it, don't use Ponymaker either). Alright, Moon Star is Self-Insert/Gary Stu #1,000,002. You could honestly replace him with any other OC in existence, and this story would be no different. There, that's what's wrong with your story.
6229489 Look at the fucking cover art. Tell me what you think.
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I would like to give my opinion on the cover art.
http://songbytoad.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/08/tottenham-blaze-007.jpg
I would prefer being in that fire than being credited for making it.
I try not to be too mean when I comment on a story but this story probably would have done better just without a cover art if nothing better was available.
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Also looks like both your comments that I'm posting a reply to came up a shortly after he seemingly abandoned his Fimfiction account, honestly cant blame him. Woulda done the same if I uploaded something like this. Although it also seems like Fimfiction messed up the date a bit, so it might be a glitch.
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Go ahead, be free! be a balanced character! I know you can do it, just run far away from this author!