They're tired of mentors never telling them what they need to know. They're tired of always being expected to forgive others, no matter what. They're tired of always being the one who saves the day when the people they save aren't worth it.
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This sounds pretty interesting. I would love to see how this goes.
Definitely got my attention with that mysterious opening.
Hot damn, this is interesting.
As I'm reading this, the song "I walk alone" by Greenday pops into my head. Love this intro.
i think this song works a bit as well
Hmm, maybe it will be answered in the next chapter, but why isn`t Trixie with this group if her name tag is with the others? Normally that means said character is gonna be a main or, at the very least, a supporting character in the story.
Too many commas in the wrong places otherwise nice first chapter, I'm iffy on naruto crossover but we'll see next few chapters if I'll keep reading, just commenting since too many commas kept throwing me out of reading
This would have more impact if you had described the context of each one instead of putting them 'in the spotlight'
My English is at the very least decent, but even I can say you have some typos and missing words. You should check on it when possible.