They're tired of mentors never telling them what they need to know. They're tired of always being expected to forgive others, no matter what. They're tired of always being the one who saves the day when the people they save aren't worth it.
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Good chapter. Well written and well paced. Though now I want dark Dee Dee to suffer.
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well this IS a chapter i'll give it that...
okay so what is UP with your wording and sentence structure?
Maybe i didn't notice before, and i'll look for it later, but this chapters overall ...everything is ...disgusting okay hold on
okay so his is JUST the FIRST sentence and i see your using past and future tense words wrong, you are not separating explanations between concepts and thoughts with commas, and when you may have correctly used those comma spacing ...okay here is what i think it should look like
and that was not even the worse example,,,
Listen i don't know whats going on and if this was to harsh then i'm sorry, but i think if you REALLY look through this chapter with an open eye you could do so much better than what i am seeing on screen.
The endless possibilities of how people can turn out by who raises them or certain events that take place differently, wonder how Usagi turns out having old Rick the dick as her grandfather.
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I must say that you are correct, I personally like the idea from Halo: Legends. In the way that we once were a much more powerful species but we were defeated by another, equally, if not slightly more powerful race that nearly wiped our the Human race. What with all the legends and myths that we have around the world who is to say that it is not true? Anyway this story is awesome and that this needs more fictions added, just MOAR.