The Beast Inside us All

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Doomhunter

Doomhunter #1 · Jun 8th, 2015 · 2 · ·

Not bad. looking forward to more.

armybrony1993

armybrony1993 #2 · Jun 8th, 2015 · 2 · ·

Hey this is armybrony1993 I just got done reading your story and thought that it was really funny and awesome and can't wait for the next chapter in the story.

Moongaze14

Moongaze14 #3 · Jun 8th, 2015 · 2 · ·

Interesting story. I'll give it a favorite and a like. Hope to see more chapters soon.

Texus

Texus #4 · Jun 14th, 2015 · · ·

I don´t know if i understand that Avatar stuff the right way at the moment, and the cover let me think, that they are maybe Werewolfs, but i am not sure, i think it is maybe a bit confusing at first.

Okay now i am confused, i just noticed, that it looks like they have invisible Wolfs, that....i am not sure if they are a programm or not.

I like that he doesn´t let her do with them what she wants, even if he should still help her, i like it that he made his point.

I would prefer a romance with a pony X Human, but i really start to like that Carly, i guess i would not mind if she should be his girlfiend, i mean the girlfriend for the Hero.

From behind I heard whispers between Twilight and Carly, a few gasps and “No Way” followed suit as I blocked my ears with my hands. “First day and I already wish I was back in cryosleep.”

Somehow i am curious now, i know what kind of talk that has to be, but i am more curious about how fast Carly spoke with her, for a moment i thought she would be jealous back in the hospital room, but now she already probably changed gossip about her Captain, or something like that.

I don´t know if i will still like it later, but right now i think this is a really interessting story, i hope there are many chapters, and no to long breaks between the chapters, i don´t complain about a few weeks, but not two or three months.
To be honest i like to read another one soon, because it was really good, but i think this isn´t that easy to write right?
Please try to have at least 2500 words every chapter, not much less than that, this chapter was maybe a little bit to long at first, but really interessting, and because of that just right.

edit: This could be a favourite, i just hope this isn´t one of the storys, that are going to be forgotten for moths, like i those i already have in my tracking list, i think most of them just write to many storys at once.

edit 2: Oh i noticed the Wolfs, are probably really some sort of programm, and i think that AI? can manipulate their bodys.

Bazing

Bazing #5 · Aug 31st, 2015 · · ·

What crossover is this? If any

Trillionaire Doge

Trillionaire Doge #6 · Jan 5th, 2016 · · ·

6091693 Well i'm sorry I upset you by making you wait over half a year, i'm back now and your comments are exactly what I need thanks for feedback and your thoughts, always helps to know how my writing and character building goes.

6307258 I will definitely try now

6377439 There's no crossover I am aware of at this moment, if there is it isn't my intention.

Texus