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The Change of Tides

This is the story that tells a quest, a qust where a filly by the name Esivra. She have to over come many fears and stand tall for what she believes in. But can she stop IT, will she make it in time. And will Twilight and her friends get to her in time?

Chapters (2)

Chapter 1 The separating · 20th May 2012 · 1,380 words
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Chapter 2 Water? · 7th Aug 2012 · 972 words
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Roker999

Roker999 #1 · May 17th, 2012 · · · Chapter 2 Water? ·

I like the general idea, but you MUST work on your grammar (most of the time I was trying to understand what you wrote) thumbs up anyways, good job. I like people who are hard-working.

NopeNopeNope

NopeNopeNope #2 · May 17th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 The separating ·

Well, I'm sorry to say it, but your grammar is a nightmare. I'd advise getting yourself a pretreated and editor. Overall, the idea is decent, and I'd be interested to see where this could go. However, characterization seems a mite bit strange. Especially esivra. A girl used to the sea life doesn't seem like one to whine. Also, "into the sunset"? That was a bit forced and cliche. Again, good idea and good luck, thumbs up.

NopeNopeNope

NopeNopeNope #3 · May 17th, 2012 · · · Chapter 2 Water? ·

Do you have a spell-checker? If not, then get google docs, it has a built in spellchecker. I must admit, I have never seen a story where Ponyville is completely submerged. Again, look into getting an editor.