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Guardians of the Neighborhood

Two fillies go on a grand adventure in their neighborhood. Many strange and wonderful things commence.

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JandT

JandT #1 · Mar 25th, 2015 · · ·

Good Start. I'm lookin' forward for more

Elric of Melnipony

Elric of Melnipony #2 · Mar 25th, 2015 · · ·

There are quite a few punctuation errors, a your/you're error, a couple of formatting issues, and at least one missing word error. ("I'll be in a few hours!" could use a word like "home" or "back" in there.) I strongly recommend finding an editor/proofreader to work with so you can polish this.

That said, it seems cute and looks like it has potential. Keep going, but don't be afraid to have someone help you improve it.