It had been thirty years since the infamous Darkest Night. The night were all of the magic of the world inexplicably disappeared. Forcing the inhabitants of Equus to adapt to a world without any magic in methods not been seen in Equestria for centuries.
The only places left in Equestria that still have law and order are the few remaining cities that scatter the countryside. While outside the cities, unlawful ponies and other races rule the land.
This story follows Midnight Shade, a hatful unicorn colt born and raised in an old-time town called Golden Heights. Who takes on a journey that brings him across a hostile post-apocalyptic Equestria, in hopes of figuring out his place in the world, to find other unicorns like himself and maybe make some new friends?
Unbeknownst to him, it turns out that the need for the success of his life quest is far more important for the world and everypony in it than he previously realized.
Rated Teen for swearing and gore.
This is my first story, so feel free to tell me what you think. 
Cover art is by http://loupgaros.deviantart.com/
This was actually an interesting read to me. I do hope you will continue, no matter what anyone says, or how many views you get. This looks like an interesting story so far, don't ruin it. Have a lovely day. 4/5 for the first chapter.
5672629 I agree with everything that has been said here.
And would like to add
This story has the hints of being the beginning of a long epic journey, now many authors feel compelled to do one of this as their first stories, but I feel like I should tell you that that's counterprudent for two reasons, one because it is recommended to get used to writing before you commit yourself to long project with the capacity of being overwhelming, and two because getting some followers before hand is recommended so that your big story has good start.
To top that up this is an adventure story featuring an OC for main character and gore (although light so far) this kind of stories tend to have an even harder time drawing readers, not because they are bad, but simply because they are not popular.
I found this story to be very good, yet I wouldn't be surprised if even after a while it doesn't get the attention it deserves for the reasons mentioned.
Keep up the good work,
~Leonzilla
About the main character,
Well he comes of as a bad boy, but not the cool rebel kind more like the bitter pitiful kind.
In other words he is really not all that likable from his personality, which will not be a bad thing if it serves to contrast with how his character will change and grow as he matures and becomes more easily relatable. The only thing he has going on at the moment is his being resented by society overall and his secret wonder for the events of the past.
Well the other way you could have done this was to make this OC a juxtaposition by making it a noble spirit that demonstrates a strong spirit and positive thinking while being in a dark and miserable world; but that trope while great is a little overused by now so is good that you bring something different.
~Leonzilla
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Thank you guys kindly for the comments! It means a lot to me and I'll continue updating the story. So don't go worrying about that!
5724333 Yes, I was shooting for the rude, sarcastic, bad boy approach. Not the cool type, but the one who has become bitter and hateful as a result of the abuse he gets from the world.
It will serve as a background for the future chapters regarding his personality as he fights through the hostile world, I just hope it works as well as I plan.
I don't know about the noble part, but he will get better at doing the right thing as the story progresses.
Again, Thank you for the comment.
~PonyStories~
5727357 Alright so in short I advise watching those two things,
1)To make your main character more appealing or likable as he matures.
And
2)To pay attention at the delivery aspect of your writing to see that this story is as good as possible.
Good luck,
~Leonzilla
5727841 Alright, I will look into those.
Thanks again!
~PonyStories~