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PonyStories2077


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Rainbow Dash wakes up one sunny morning to find a one, interesting fact.

She is invisible, and does what any rational minded pony would do. Panic, and then go get Twilight to fix it! However, fate has other plans in store for Dash.

Warning! The following story may contain scenes of graphic stupidity and terrible puns. Read at your own risk!


Cover art is by the awesome SLB94.

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There are a couple of errors, but nothing to distract one from the story. Good work! :twilightsmile:

ha nice! Not crazy amazing but I liked it!

Very funny!

You have some spelling errors, such as "Wounderbolts" instead of "Wonderbolts" and "pedals" instead of "petals".

Other than that, this was a delightful and funny read.

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Thank you very much for catching those errors. I cannot believe I missed those on my re-reads. :pinkiesick:

Anyway, they're fixed now and again, thanks for the feedback and I'm glad you enjoyed it!

~PonyStories~

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There was also an "effects" instead of "affects". (Affect is a verb, while effect is a noun).

Other than that, it was a great story!

This was a cute little story ...with no comment from me but that the word you wanted was "shudder" and not "shutter."
A "shudder" is a strong shiver through your body. A "shutter" is something that closes over a window to protect the glass from a storm, or over a camera lens, to prevent light entering through the lens.
But that's trivial stuff.
Fun story!:scootangel:

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Both errors have been fixed. Thanks for the feedback guys! :pinkiesad2:

If you catch anything else, feel free to give a comment.
Thanks again!

~PonyStories~

TLP

Awesome story!

Also, nice Inception reference.:ajsmug:

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Oh, well if you're going to thank me for pointing things out, I might as well give this another go.

Where Rainbow's drowsy mind automatically started her normal morning routine. Stumbling around the bathroom to flip on the light and crawling into the shower.
Are you sure you wanted to separate "routine" and "Stumbling" with a period?

Tank imminently did what his kind does best; he shoved his head back into his shell.
Tank immediately did what his kind does best; he pulled his head back into his shell.

Oomph!” She let out a pained grunt after bouncing off a passing earth pony stallion, getting the wind was knocked out of her.

getting the wind was knocked out of her.

He blinked his eyes once and turned to his original destination, the Scallion Bar & Lounge. He looked between the hoofprints and the bar a few times, before trotting away.
Maybe you meant Scallion. Maybe you meant Stallion... I don't know. I can go along with having a bar named after a kind of onion...

Rainbow continued her journey through town deep in thought, when she smashed her nose through a door.
She can do that. We've seen her destroy a barn by flying through it... But are you sure you meant "through" there?

Okay, that's enough nit-picking for now. If I pick all of the nits, there won't be any left to pick tomorrow! :pinkiecrazy:

I really want to like this story but I can't get over how RD and Pinkie got this reaction;

Twilight choked back a sob, forgetting all sense of reality and she started crying even harder. “I… I… I’m Sorry Pinkie! I didn’t realize you were telling the truth!”

and didn't stop the prank.

(Don’t ask how, its pony magic, I don't know).
Nice.

“B-Buy some apples!-K!”
I got a smile out of that one.

Meanwhile, on earth, a human named Sir Isaac Newton is rolling around in his grave. “God Damnint Pinkie Pie.”
Okay, that one made me laugh. :rainbowlaugh:

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Alright, all of those mistakes have been fixed. Thanks for bringing them to my attention! :raritystarry:

As for the "bar named after a kind of onion,” yes that was intentional.

Thanks again for the feedback! :rainbowkiss:

"“Wha, Pinkie!” Twilight yelped then went silent, staring at Rainbow. “A… are these inferred goggles?”"

infrared goggles

Could you please write a sequel about Celestia's first encounter with Useful Joke? That ending kind of left me hanging, and I'd like to hear the tale! This story was fun, and it would be made even better if it was expanded.

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