Vinyl Scratch: A history

by Novalis14

Ponyville

Vinyl placed the last picture frame on the hook in her new bedroom wall. They were officially moved in. Their new apartment in Ponyville was the same size as there one in Canterlot and cost half the price. It had taken some persuasion but both Octavia and vinyls agent had agreed to the plan. Now at age twenty two Vinyl and Octavia were Ponville's newest residents.

“Vinyl, where is my records of Bethooven?”

“In the waste basket with the rest of the trash.” Vinyl snarked admiring her new abode and making sure it was spotless, a habit picked up from her days at the academy.

Octavia angrily stomped over to the waste basket and was relieved to see that Vinyl had taken out the actual trash, leaving her record in the clean white bag.

“Must you always tease me?” She huffed pulling it out and adding it the the collection in their living room.

“Aw but its so much fun.” Vinyl said smirking. Octavia simply glowered.

“Hey Tavs I was going to head down to the market place to do some grocery shopping before a go to check out my new studio. Care to join me?” Octavia thought it over for a moment before nodding and following her friend out the door.

As the two strode down the cobblestone street they admired the cozy little town. Both were satisfied with the choice they had made.

“Oh my gosh, new ponies!” A pink blur whooshed past them from behind and came to a stop in front of the two friends. “HI my name is Pinkie Pie the official town party planner well not official I don't have a card or something oh I should totally get a card then I can just hand ponies my card instead on introducing myself but then I wont get to introduce myself so maybe that's not a good idea but anyway that doesn't matter because I just came over here to introduce myself and ask you your names so.” The pink pony took a very long breath. “Hi I'm Pinkie Pie who are you?”

Octavia blinked.

“Hi Pinkie my names Vinyl Scratch and this is my roommate and best friend Octavia. And you can introduce yourself and have a card as well.”

Octavia turned to her roommate. “You understood that? How could you, she talked so fast.”

Vinyl shrugged.”I once made my coffee with redbull, I think I gained some kind of sixth sense, As well as killed about half my taste buds.”

Octavia just shook her head.

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After a brief discussion about greeting parties and what kind of cake they wanted for it the two parties parted ways.

“Heh if ponies around here are all like that this is going to be a blast.” Octavia silently prayed to Celestia that they weren't

They were passing by a candy store when a green projectile shot from inside. “LYRA HEARTSTRINGS!!! WHAT HAVE I TOLD YOU ABOUT ENTERING MY KITCHEN!”

The green projectile, in reality a mint unicorn, laughed out loud.

“Lyra?” Both Vinyl and Octavia questioned in unison. She turned

“HEY! It's you guys. Long time no see.”

A yellow sponge sailed through the air narrowly missing Lyra. “Aw come on Bonnie, if your going to be mad at me at least throw straight.” The next one hit her straight in the muzzle. “Better.”

The mint unicorn turned back to her old friends. “So what are you two doing here in ponyville?”

“Just moved down here, we took a page from your book and are trying long distance careers.” Vinyl said watching for any more soft projectiles.

“We were feeling too crowded.” Octavia added.

Lyra got a evil grin on her face. “So have you two finally gotten together?”

Both ponies looked at each other before turning back and answering in unison “Never going to happen.” They both said with finality.

“Lyra get back in here and help me clean up your mess.” The voice from inside of the candy shop called.

“Well it was nice seeing you guys again, maybe later we can get together and I can introduce you to my sponge hurling friend.” With a wave Lyra headed back into the shop.

Vinyl looked up at the clock tower that was visible from this side of town. “I'd better head to the recording studio, I don't want to piss them off this early on.” Parting ways with her roommate the white unicorn hummed a cheery tune to herself as she made her way to her new work place.

Entering the simple building she grinned at the ponies inside. “Hey you all ready to make some music!”
She settled in on a couch and was beginning to talk with the recording technician when a crash resounded through the room. A grey and blonde head stuck through the door.

“heh heh” A sheepish voice said. “Mails here?”

Author's Note:

The End.

I hope you've enjoyed the history of Vinyl Scratch

Comments

[vincent789]

5573023 NO WAY OMGOMGOMG
How the H*ll Did you get that????

[vincent789]

..... are you kiding me???
THE END?
atleast make another story about vinyl...
PLease????
oh and:

The pink pony too a very long breath

i don't get this, it confusses me because it should be:

The pink pony took a very long breath

[Zweiss]

I WOULD LOVE TO SEE THIS AS A FULL BLOW STORY, I LOVED IT!!!
-Silv <3

[Novalis14]

5605550
What do you mean full blown story?

[Zweiss]

5627265
I mean like I would love to see all of the events that went on in between these chapters. p.s. Again loved the story GG

[Telaros]

That picture really doesn't do this fic much justice. Also, not sure what the AU thing is for, but I guess it doesn't matter I suppose. Below are my thoughts and since I have a habit of only being able to express myself through lots of words, apologies in advance. :P

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I personally feel this story deserves more love. It's really nice. Though, maybe the picture or the description didn't do it justice? Description does read a bit too much like "My headcanon, let me show you it!" and the picture just doesn't match the overall tone of the story. Maybe, possibly, go for a more vague description about Vinyl getting down on the dumps over a remark or looks she gets from some ponies due to how those in her profession are stereotyped. That maybe it gets her to think back on her life, possibly having decided to go to a bar to try to drink her sorrows away? Such a description can make the story more appealing if you keep it short and to the point. Make it sound more relatable.

Also, only thing that would have made this perfect for me is if you had ended the story in a "come full circle" sort of way. A nice scene where she's brought out of her reverie by good company, or maybe Derpy derps into the bar with a "you got mail" that brings Vinyl back to the here and now, would make this feel more complete. Show that she's got no time to dwell on those who judge her base on a stereotype. Or something.

Some words like: "were" that should be "we're", a "to breath" that should be "to breathe", one common one which I just attributed at first to the character accent, but was spoken by two different ponies, was "preform" which should be "perform" and other small bits like: Rather then adding "(clickity here if interested)" for links, you can do what you did with the Luna fic and make a clickable link with the story's text, just don't forget to add the period which you forgot to add in the Luna story after you fixed the broken sentence before.

I'd recommend sending to an editors group to further enhance this otherwise delightful take on Vynil's life. I know the story is months old now, but it's certainly worth sprucing up.

Anyhow, loved the story.

Suggestions for a new cover: https://derpibooru.org/936414?scope=scpeeee654ada9ca9b5958e6473ae38df1b3bcd7be2e

https://derpibooru.org/936386?scope=scpeeee654ada9ca9b5958e6473ae38df1b3bcd7be2e (probably too chipper, maybe for a possible sequel someday? )

https://derpibooru.org/938359?scope=scpeeee654ada9ca9b5958e6473ae38df1b3bcd7be2e

https://derpibooru.org/940934?scope=scpeeee654ada9ca9b5958e6473ae38df1b3bcd7be2e

https://derpibooru.org/940733?scope=scpeeee654ada9ca9b5958e6473ae38df1b3bcd7be2e

I personally enjoyed this story. Wish I had spotted it sooner.