• Published 8th Jan 2015
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KIDS!!!!! - KomodoBrony



A clopfic about original OCs from Kiala97 deciding to start a family and how they go about doing it

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Comments ( 3 )

depends on you man if you can are not good job keep it up:twilightsmile:

laughter to herself in her mind

I think you meant to say "laughing to herself" there were a few other mistakes, but this was the first.

here's another one that needs immideate fixing

The two parents starred lovingly at their child as she slept

I believe you meant to say "stared lovingly at their child" you have to look out for those rogue Rs, I hear they've been causing other authors problems all for a few days now.

It's there another word for "Daww!" ?

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