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KomodoBrony


Follower of great writers and artists; I'm here to create stories for artists and spread the word of great writers everywhere, and I'm always willing to accept and give help to everypony

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It’s Crystal Clarity’s birthday, all of her friends and family have come to celebrate with her. At the end of it all, her dad, Spike, gives her a gift that is long overdue; One that’ll last a lifetime.

Character’s owned by Kilala97

This story is something that I thought about on my own, and kilala has no picture of this, it's sorta something I thought of one day while I had nothing better to do.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 22 )

A good read on a subject I've wanted to see for a while. The only problem I see is the continuity with Idle. As far as I know, Claire became pregnant long after every mortal pony in the NextGen dies.

5637996 well it's been sorta fuzzy on the details as to who was alive during that time in their lives, but that's why I cut back on mentioning who was at the party. Still I can see the cause of confusion from your viewpoint.:twilightsheepish:

:applecry::fluttercry::raritycry::fluttershysad::raritydespair::twilightangry2: how dare make rarity die!!!

5638481 Uhhh, do you know the Kilala-verse any my friend? If you don't then I suggest you do some reading, cuz you're late to the party.

Ok, I’ll home soon.

you missed a word there, as it is it makes little to no sense, I think you meant to say "Ok, I’ll head home soon." There were a few other little errors, but this was the first one that jumped out at me.

5669243 thanks ill look into it:twilightsmile:

This was bittersweet.

5669514 In a good way or........?:rainbowhuh:

I read a solid 15 words and turned it away. I don't doubt it's a fantastic story. I just really don't feel like crying right now. I'll still like it tho. Just because it doesn't have any dislikes.

5770182 Well if you feel like crying later than save it for then, either way thanks for the skim:twilightsmile:

:heart: that was awesome

Wow it took 2 months before one person decided to downvote this story :rainbowlaugh:

Oh well, there's always gonna be one critic for anything:raritywink:

before I truly left ya’ll behind

Why is Rarity speaking like AJ? Wouldn't it make more sense for her to say 'you all' not 'ya'll'.

5941589 not a big deal really but ill change it regardless:raritywink:

You just had to give me the FEELS:fluttercry: I love it!

Thank you for the read. This story really inspired me to make this year’s Mother’s Day really great along with everyone in my family Birthdays and Christmas. Basically making the “family” moments more wonderful this year.:twilightsmile:

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Glad I could help inspire you like that.

I give you best wishes on that goal:twilightsmile::raritywink:

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Thank you for the support :twilightsmile:
Best wishes for you too!

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