This chapter is... very sweet. I... really like this chapter. The ending is really cute, in a way. The beginning had me worried (and with this chapter called "Endgame"), but that's because I was invested in the story. With someponies having there own bit, I hope RD and AJ keep their relationship exclusive to themselves, but whatever. I like this chapter. And RD screwing up breakfast was cute.
A pretty amazing wrap-up to the most emotionally complicated and plot-heavy clopfic I've read. Seriously makes me want to read more about the characters involved, which is my benchmark for a good fic.
317225 :c i will miss this story :l, 'cause it's amazing, really well written and instead of just being clop after clop it actually has emotion and an amazing storyline in it,
such beautifulness :'3
but i'll read the last chapter anyway ;3, writing anything similar or non clop after this? :3
I love this story to bits and pieces. Honestly I'm not sure exactly how to express how much I loved this, the plot and the clop were awesome. I'm going to have to lurk around for whatever else you get up to.
The emotional aspect of this story has to be the best part. You may not have meant to but you've written a higher quality romance novel here... based on ponies... but nonetheless awesome. I've had to read a few of my Fiance's lady-porn and I can find quite a few correlations.
Oh dear, the ending brought a tear to my eye. I didn't shed it, but I did get briefly watery-eyed. It's such a satisfactory ending, the bit went from a source of conflict to what will be the source of happiness for many ponies. That's priceless . The deep drama behind it all just makes the simple ending that much more enjoyable.
I can't make a comment on the ponies' mental states that I haven't already, so I'll spare everypony else. Applejack was pretty freaking cold to Twilight, but Twilight took it really well. Sort of sketchy on Twi's reaction to what Applejack is saying there, but I'm not really complaining. *insert shrugpony*
I'm wondering, Applejinx... did you have the whole thing planned out from the very beginning? Or did you just come up with something after you got a few chapters in ? I don't know why I have that question or why it should matter much at all, but I'm curious.
Got any more plans after the epilogue? For another story I mean. Or maybe you just want to chill out for a while and take a break from writing. What's your cup of tea?
318121 I had different plans at different times. Everything really changed when Trixie showed up and Twilight stepped into the dark side.
My cup of tea? Tetley British Blend and lots of it oh you mean plans? That depends on what ponies want. On the one hand, continuing the narrative threads in a second book is an obvious idea. On the other hand the ponies have been through a lot- seems like I got to let them rest up at least a LITTLE.
Or more accurately, give them a lil' break before they start meddlin' with each other and cause a ruckus all over again. I know just who will blow a gasket and why, and how the current situation would unravel- but all I want to do is write 'em finding their peace and let 'em enjoy it for a lil'. Cos like I said, they been through a lot...
It depends on what ponies want. This has been a novel. I am a novelist, I treated it as one. Ain't my first novel, either. If I could write a pony clop novel for y'all (in about five months!) I could do it again. I'll be writin' SOMETHIN' on account of I am a writer. Whether it's poni depends on whether there's more call for that. (ain't nothin' you could write that'll make you J.K. Rowling, sugar, there's only one of those a generation and the position is taken- the rest of us are just lookin' for some love)
I'm a little sad to see this end in a bittersweet way, but I suppose that's the way of bittersweet endings. This had ups and downs for me because the working of your ideas into a dramatic story wasn't really what I liked about this so much; it was the play of your impeccable M6 characterizations in such fun situations. Maybe the fact that the drama of the story stung me a little is a *good* thing even if it was a little uncomfortable...
Regardless, this stands as one of the best-written fics I've ever had the good fortune of discovering. It was the one that got me started interested in reading fics, it's a major inspiration to my own writing, and now that I've finished it, I might have a tough time separating what's Applejinx's headcanon from what I've concluded for myself after staring long and hard at actual canon.
I just finished blowing through everything from Intermission to the end, so I have quite a bit to say. Particularly, that I think your Pinkie is one of my favorite things in all the fanfics I have ever come into contact with.
I realize, in retrospect, that you've basically written a "Psycho Twilight" a la Lesson Zero/Bird in the Hoof/It's About Time. I'm also fascinated by how deep you went with Trixie. You practically created her from nothing, and you went so far with it.
Enough of my blathering. I loved this. I am sad that this couldn't last forever and ever. From the bottom of my heart, thank you for writing this.
It figures that the second I decided to type out a comment, it goes up the same time a new chapter comes up. Well if you want to see my critique check the previous chapter.
326014 Kurbz- I have gone through and fixed all the dialogue punctuation ( ." in the wrong places ) not just in this chapter but in all twenty chapters and also in the Kindle ebook. Which is not out (not that it'll be on Amazon, it's just a .mobi) because Trixie is NOT FINISHED- not quite. There's one more chapter which is more sweet endings and leads us back step by step to our first pairing- because there needs to be a sweet ending because PONIES.
Hopefully early next week I will have it for y'all.
Oh god this story is everything I like in a fic. Even if it didn't have clop I would still have loved this. I had forgotten to allow mature stories to show up so I just got caught up and it was an emotional roller lasted these past few chapters. I'm glad you didn't get too grimdark but it really added to it. I'm glad you resolved the Trixie conflict because she is my absolute favorite FAVORITE character and any story that involves her redemption and gives a believable back story that shows she isn't a bad pony is good in my book. Thanks for the ride. Can't wait til next and unfortunately final chapter. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Twilight stirred, and fixed her with a bitter, cranky gaze. “Trixie, lest you forget, the last time anyone had sex in this bed, it was me raping you. Don’t you remember? I tied you up, gagged you so you couldn’t scream, and I fucking raped you. Mind explaining why I deserve smiles and cuddles? I thought I was doing research too, without your cooperation, but I did terrible things.”
Trixie smiled. “Oh. You mean the single most arousing experience of my life, right?”
“You’re so fucking twisted,” grumbled Twilight.
This made me smile.
Oh ya, and an MK ref for Trixie after they make the new bit
D'awwwww! That was so nice of them. Twi and Trixie do make a good pairing a lot of the time. Well, time to finish up this story and move on to the next one.
I think I'll leave it at that.
This chapter is... very sweet. I... really like this chapter. The ending is really cute, in a way. The beginning had me worried (and with this chapter called "Endgame"), but that's because I was invested in the story. With someponies having there own bit, I hope RD and AJ keep their relationship exclusive to themselves, but whatever. I like this chapter. And RD screwing up breakfast was cute.
A pretty amazing wrap-up to the most emotionally complicated and plot-heavy clopfic I've read. Seriously makes me want to read more about the characters involved, which is my benchmark for a good fic.
This was sweet and wonderful and weird and captivating. Thank you so much!
D: is the story finished?
i hope not.
but i suppose it does seem like an amazing closure,
bravo :3
317210
One more chapter with more of the happy endings and cute stuff.
For THIS book.
of clopfic
317225 :c i will miss this story :l, 'cause it's amazing, really well written and instead of just being clop after clop it actually has emotion and an amazing storyline in it,
such beautifulness :'3
but i'll read the last chapter anyway ;3, writing anything similar or non clop after this? :3
I love this story to bits and pieces. Honestly I'm not sure exactly how to express how much I loved this, the plot and the clop were awesome. I'm going to have to lurk around for whatever else you get up to.
The emotional aspect of this story has to be the best part. You may not have meant to but you've written a higher quality romance novel here... based on ponies... but nonetheless awesome. I've had to read a few of my Fiance's lady-porn and I can find quite a few correlations.
Seeing this update fixed my day.
The only thing I didn't like was how snooping Celestia was never used, maybe in the final chapter?
Oh dear, the ending brought a tear to my eye. I didn't shed it, but I did get briefly watery-eyed. It's such a satisfactory ending, the bit went from a source of conflict to what will be the source of happiness for many ponies. That's priceless . The deep drama behind it all just makes the simple ending that much more enjoyable.
I can't make a comment on the ponies' mental states that I haven't already, so I'll spare everypony else. Applejack was pretty freaking cold to Twilight, but Twilight took it really well. Sort of sketchy on Twi's reaction to what Applejack is saying there, but I'm not really complaining. *insert shrugpony*
I'm wondering, Applejinx... did you have the whole thing planned out from the very beginning? Or did you just come up with something after you got a few chapters in ? I don't know why I have that question or why it should matter much at all, but I'm curious.
Got any more plans after the epilogue? For another story I mean. Or maybe you just want to chill out for a while and take a break from writing. What's your cup of tea?
Truly:
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318121
I had different plans at different times. Everything really changed when Trixie showed up and Twilight stepped into the dark side.
My cup of tea? Tetley British Blend and lots of it oh you mean plans? That depends on what ponies want. On the one hand, continuing the narrative threads in a second book is an obvious idea. On the other hand the ponies have been through a lot- seems like I got to let them rest up at least a LITTLE.
Or more accurately, give them a lil' break before they start meddlin' with each other and cause a ruckus all over again. I know just who will blow a gasket and why, and how the current situation would unravel- but all I want to do is write 'em finding their peace and let 'em enjoy it for a lil'. Cos like I said, they been through a lot...
It depends on what ponies want. This has been a novel. I am a novelist, I treated it as one. Ain't my first novel, either. If I could write a pony clop novel for y'all (in about five months!) I could do it again. I'll be writin' SOMETHIN' on account of I am a writer. Whether it's poni depends on whether there's more call for that. (ain't nothin' you could write that'll make you J.K. Rowling, sugar, there's only one of those a generation and the position is taken- the rest of us are just lookin' for some love)
All my respect to Trixie Lulamoon.
D'awww indeed.
My Twixie dreams are fulfilled for now. Now go back and fix the damned dialogue punctuation, it ruins the scene for grammar nazis like me.
326014
Oh, no, did I git more "Incorrect period." said Character... ?
I am so plagued by that. Consarn it.
I'm a little sad to see this end in a bittersweet way, but I suppose that's the way of bittersweet endings. This had ups and downs for me because the working of your ideas into a dramatic story wasn't really what I liked about this so much; it was the play of your impeccable M6 characterizations in such fun situations. Maybe the fact that the drama of the story stung me a little is a *good* thing even if it was a little uncomfortable...
Regardless, this stands as one of the best-written fics I've ever had the good fortune of discovering. It was the one that got me started interested in reading fics, it's a major inspiration to my own writing, and now that I've finished it, I might have a tough time separating what's Applejinx's headcanon from what I've concluded for myself after staring long and hard at actual canon.
I just finished blowing through everything from Intermission to the end, so I have quite a bit to say. Particularly, that I think your Pinkie is one of my favorite things in all the fanfics I have ever come into contact with.
I realize, in retrospect, that you've basically written a "Psycho Twilight" a la Lesson Zero/Bird in the Hoof/It's About Time. I'm also fascinated by how deep you went with Trixie. You practically created her from nothing, and you went so far with it.
Enough of my blathering. I loved this. I am sad that this couldn't last forever and ever. From the bottom of my heart, thank you for writing this.
It figures that the second I decided to type out a comment, it goes up the same time a new chapter comes up. Well if you want to see my critique check the previous chapter.
326014
Kurbz- I have gone through and fixed all the dialogue punctuation ( ." in the wrong places ) not just in this chapter but in all twenty chapters and also in the Kindle ebook. Which is not out (not that it'll be on Amazon, it's just a .mobi) because Trixie is NOT FINISHED- not quite. There's one more chapter which is more sweet endings and leads us back step by step to our first pairing- because there needs to be a sweet ending because PONIES.
Hopefully early next week I will have it for y'all.
330572
And that is why I love you.
Oh god this story is everything I like in a fic. Even if it didn't have clop I would still have loved this. I had forgotten to allow mature stories to show up so I just got caught up and it was an emotional roller lasted these past few chapters. I'm glad you didn't get too grimdark but it really added to it. I'm glad you resolved the Trixie conflict because she is my absolute favorite FAVORITE character and any story that involves her redemption and gives a believable back story that shows she isn't a bad pony is good in my book. Thanks for the ride. Can't wait til next and unfortunately final chapter. I look forward to reading more of your work.
*realizes he can reread this @ any time thanks to the Download button*
*signs in @ almost 11 on Sunday night to snag it*
*realizes the Incomplete tag is still marked*
*magically transforms from to *
Twilight stirred, and fixed her with a bitter, cranky gaze. “Trixie, lest you forget, the last time anyone had sex in this bed, it was me raping you. Don’t you remember? I tied you up, gagged you so you couldn’t scream, and I fucking raped you. Mind explaining why I deserve smiles and cuddles? I thought I was doing research too, without your cooperation, but I did terrible things.”
Trixie smiled. “Oh. You mean the single most arousing experience of my life, right?”
“You’re so fucking twisted,” grumbled Twilight.
This made me smile.
Oh ya, and an MK ref for Trixie after they make the new bit
"FINISH HER"
Hehe...nerdy-corn sex...
Everyone happy! And the got the bits to work without exploding!
I'm calling this new--for me to see anyways--Twixie!
D'awwwww! That was so nice of them. Twi and Trixie do make a good pairing a lot of the time. Well, time to finish up this story and move on to the next one.
As I continue reading there are less views on every chapter but more comments? I don't get it.