quoting a friend "I think, only think, that everything I know is wrong. I'm sicked by this fucking shit. I don't even know what anymore. WHO THE FLYING TITDICKS WANTS TO WRITE A STORY ABOUT FUCKING PONIES WITH DICKS. I'll tell you who; the fucktwat that needs to kill himself. With a large spiked mallet. Go chop your dick off, you fuckwhore. Yours truly; Happyface."
ahahahaha my godness
this shit, man. This shit. So fucking awesome to read with extremely loud orchestral battle music.
I can never tell what the hell mrheadhopper really thinks. Any way great story. Very interesting. Reminds me alot of Luna's Wand and other Raging semi stories. Good job bro.
28745 Gapaot ought to like where the Appledash went with this last chapter. Though as always it's complicated. 31876 Rarity is up next- though this does not imply she is needy in the way Fluttershy is... but that only raises greater curiosities. 39643 Your friend shouldn't be readin' stuff that would only upset him... but I guess that's his privilege, ain't it?
Sensual and loving and in-character. You're making me a happy pony!
The only worry I'd pose is you don't need to one-up each previous chapter in explosiveness of orgasmic release, ferocity of intercourse, degree of pre-coital desire/post-coital collapse, and so forth.
40590 Don't worry. Dashie and AJ kind of blew past some limits there and discussion must ensue- and the plot continues in other directions. Applejack is serious about not continuing to escalate things. That said, I did know some ponies wanted to see Dash ruined and ravaged- the secret there is, Dashie was one of those ponies, so it was a bit of a foregone conclusion. She kinda... made it happen, by fair means or foul. Which is typical Dashie...
This whole story thus far has already blown my initial expectations I had for it-- currently, it now stands amongst my favorite fanfics of all time, regardless of its mature rating. The way you effectively develop believable character personalities while staying hypothetically in-character is astonishing. Even with the Fluttershy portrayed here, I still believe it is very fitting considering her inner-rage we've all seen and the way you tied her similar actions and dialogue similar to her 'discorded' character; as if her 'other personality' was struggling and managed to somewhat escape, if only momentarily.
I was very surprised the typical jokes such as the internet famous "balls weren't touching, therefore it isn't gay" actually serve as a legit plot device, that not only just make it sort of humorous, but made me feel attached to the characters beliefs thoughts, and ways of life in general.
HA! Rainbow is a joke. Maybe it's just me, but it seems REALLY hypocritical of Rainbow to be ok with the two of them with sleeping around with anyone, but then completely break down crying because of a wing touch.
I hope things are patched up with Fluttershy, and I hope Rainbow is less... like this... in the future chapters and stories.
Edit: Yes, I get it. Different species, biology, cultures, etc. I still don't like her.
This story keeps getting better as it goes on. It started off a bit off-center to me. But now i'm realizing that i just don't know a lot of the rules that it's running by. The wing thing makes certain things so clear. Humans see sex and love as closely meshed, and so do some ponies, like Applejack. But to pegasi, love is moreso "located" in their wings. It's weird, but totally valid, and definitely an interesting concept to work with.
Also, love the humor in this one. Angel getting sick of Fluttershy's shit had me loling.
Angel beamed, applauded, and scampered out the door
I imagined Angel's quick little bunny ovation and lost it.
I'm loving this more and more. A couple/few notes with this chapter:
-I'm learning new words cuz of this. -at the opening I was laughing some because when AJ mentioned 'ready for a ride' the RD version of the 'Surprise Buttseks' meme popped in my head.
-later I was laughing when angel kept booting Flutter's rump, after she admitted to AJ she nearly climaxed from it. Especially cuz the 'slap my ass' video popped into my head.
-and flutter has got some crazy things going on in the shy little cutesy head of hers. She though of EVERYTHING for AJ to do.
Hmm, very interesting chapter right there. Yep, wings=very intimate and are only touched by their true love. Fluttershy seemed the tiniest bit too aggressive and assertive in this chapter. Also, it's always the quiet ones, isn't it? Onward to the next chapter!
quoting a friend
"I think, only think, that everything I know is wrong. I'm sicked by this fucking shit. I don't even know what anymore. WHO THE FLYING TITDICKS WANTS TO WRITE A STORY ABOUT FUCKING PONIES WITH DICKS. I'll tell you who; the fucktwat that needs to kill himself. With a large spiked mallet. Go chop your dick off, you fuckwhore. Yours truly; Happyface."
ahahahaha my godness
this shit, man. This shit. So fucking awesome to read with extremely loud orchestral battle music.
I can never tell what the hell mrheadhopper really thinks. Any way great story. Very interesting. Reminds me alot of Luna's Wand and other Raging semi stories. Good job bro.
28745
Gapaot ought to like where the Appledash went with this last chapter. Though as always it's complicated.
31876
Rarity is up next- though this does not imply she is needy in the way Fluttershy is... but that only raises greater curiosities.
39643
Your friend shouldn't be readin' stuff that would only upset him... but I guess that's his privilege, ain't it?
Sensual and loving and in-character. You're making me a happy pony!
The only worry I'd pose is you don't need to one-up each previous chapter in explosiveness of orgasmic release, ferocity of intercourse, degree of pre-coital desire/post-coital collapse, and so forth.
40590
Don't worry. Dashie and AJ kind of blew past some limits there and discussion must ensue- and the plot continues in other directions. Applejack is serious about not continuing to escalate things.
That said, I did know some ponies wanted to see Dash ruined and ravaged- the secret there is, Dashie was one of those ponies, so it was a bit of a foregone conclusion. She kinda... made it happen, by fair means or foul. Which is typical Dashie...
Dear god this is so bucking epic in more ways than one! I always thought fluttershy would be the crazy type but you take it to a whole new level!!
This whole story thus far has already blown my initial expectations I had for it-- currently, it now stands amongst my favorite fanfics of all time, regardless of its mature rating. The way you effectively develop believable character personalities while staying hypothetically in-character is astonishing. Even with the Fluttershy portrayed here, I still believe it is very fitting considering her inner-rage we've all seen and the way you tied her similar actions and dialogue similar to her 'discorded' character; as if her 'other personality' was struggling and managed to somewhat escape, if only momentarily.
I was very surprised the typical jokes such as the internet famous "balls weren't touching, therefore it isn't gay" actually serve as a legit plot device, that not only just make it sort of humorous, but made me feel attached to the characters beliefs thoughts, and ways of life in general.
Great story, keep it up! x foreverrrrr!
Fluttershy's into some crazy shit
Am I the only one who finds it weird ponies have boobs? And to a lesser extent, nipples?
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Do Ponies have breasts? The answer is yes.
Amazing chapter. And the characterization and dialog got better, which was the only thing they lacked a bit in the earlier chapters.
HA! Rainbow is a joke. Maybe it's just me, but it seems REALLY hypocritical of Rainbow to be ok with the two of them with sleeping around with anyone, but then completely break down crying because of a wing touch.
I hope things are patched up with Fluttershy, and I hope Rainbow is less... like this... in the future chapters and stories.
Edit: Yes, I get it. Different species, biology, cultures, etc. I still don't like her.
This story keeps getting better as it goes on. It started off a bit off-center to me. But now i'm realizing that i just don't know a lot of the rules that it's running by. The wing thing makes certain things so clear. Humans see sex and love as closely meshed, and so do some ponies, like Applejack. But to pegasi, love is moreso "located" in their wings. It's weird, but totally valid, and definitely an interesting concept to work with.
Also, love the humor in this one. Angel getting sick of Fluttershy's shit had me loling.
I imagined Angel's quick little bunny ovation and lost it.
I'm loving this more and more. A couple/few notes with this chapter:
-I'm learning new words cuz of this.
-at the opening I was laughing some because when AJ mentioned 'ready for a ride' the RD version of the 'Surprise Buttseks' meme popped in my head.
-later I was laughing when angel kept booting Flutter's rump, after she admitted to AJ she nearly climaxed from it. Especially cuz the 'slap my ass' video popped into my head.
-and flutter has got some crazy things going on in the shy little cutesy head of hers. She though of EVERYTHING for AJ to do.
Hmm, very interesting chapter right there. Yep, wings=very intimate and are only touched by their true love. Fluttershy seemed the tiniest bit too aggressive and assertive in this chapter. Also, it's always the quiet ones, isn't it? Onward to the next chapter!
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I guess they send birds or something