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I suck at writing Fanfics and there are too many critics on the damn site.

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EbonyGlow finds himself sharing stories with his friend Cleaver the mason while also confronting his father for the first time in years.

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Your main character's name is "EbonyGlow"? Really?

-Text walls
-Character names
-Formatting
-Grammer

Yeah, I'm going to be in an endless depression.

4886881 Whats wrong the name is creative and I was afraid of using something cheesy like DarkGlow or DimShimmer:unsuresweetie:

4887101

First of all your character names are written wrong. Second of all I think you and me have a different definition of "creative". Lastly all of them are cheesy. All of them.

4887252 DimShimmer not that bad. Too late now anyways.


4887101 Look, depression is a topic within many fictions, including mine, but those stories have an actually plot, line of events that lead to a conclusion. This is just rambling on and on about how sad this guy is. Get's dull really fucking quick.


4886980 Agreed

4887283

True, true. But there's plenty of other names out there. It's not that hard to find some good ones if you try hard enough.

4887314 Eroded Darkness? May suit this fic :p

4887327

Dark Darkness of the Darkiest Dark? Anyways, what about Eternal Darkness?

4887335 how about Mack the Knife,
Cause he's so edgy.

4886881
4887101 It's almost impossible to see a character named Ebony Anything without thinking of Enoby Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way, of My Immortal.

The other problem is that ebony is a wood, and as such, it does not glow unless it is on fire.

4898166
I was thinking of "ebony" in the sense of being a synonym for "black", which made the name even more meaningless. "Black glow"? Not without drugs or head trauma...

But maybe I just think that way because I'm not "goff" enough. (I'm not "prep", though.)

4898184 Oh, black glow is ok. It's an oxymoron. Renaissance authors are crazy about it: e.g. "Blind sight, dead life, poor mortal-living ghost." Petrarchan poets will not stop using them, nor will Romeo:
Why then, O brawling love! O loving hate!
O any thing, of nothing first create!
O heavy lightness, serious vanity,
Misshapen chaos of well-seeming forms,
Feather of lead, bright smoke, cold fire, sick health,
Still-waking sleep, that is not what it is!
This love feel I, that feel no love in this.

--Later, he meets Juliet and is asked to cut back on the metaphors before she agrees to marry him. And then he is dead, but I'm pretty sure the oxymorons had nothing to do with it.

Milton wins the prize, I think, for "darkness visible."

I'm actually on the verge of thinking that this fic was intentionally written to be bad.

4898271
Meh, my brother's the Shakespearean. I think this is more of an attempt to be edgy than to present a dichotomy.

4898351 Can't help it. Occupational hazard.

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