Just a MLP fan trying my hand at fan fiction.
Most people think Maud Pie is just plain boring, but in truth, she just takes more time to understand. Most people think Cheese Sandwich is a loud party animal.... but there is much more to him than that. Everyone thinks they are nothing alike. But, as the saying goes, opposites attract! When Maud and Cheese get together, it turns out that they may be opposites in personality, but they are one in spirit.
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interesting.
now it's getting interesting.
...Malarson?
...MAlarson?
M A Larson!?
Please tell me that was intentional!!
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But of course! ;-)
Ba-Dum Tss!
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Whoops - thanks for the spelling catch! Fixed!
"BRING THE MAUD SANDWICH! yes. yes! Exquisite!"
"Photo finish? are you a shipper?"
anyway, awesome story, loving it so far!
4815358 Thou art very much welcome!
GIVE MEH THE NEXT CHAPTER! GIVE MEH THE MUSHY STUFFS >:OOO I WANT THE POINTLESS GUSHY ROMANTIC FANGIRLNESSSSSS
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But I'm glad you are enjoying the story!
We have a bit to go before the mush -- patience, my young padawan!
This? Very sweet, AND a legitimate memory aid.
It's been niggling me for a while, but you missed the perfect opportunity to name this fic "Chalk and Cheese".
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"Maud and Cheese" is supposed to be reminiscent of "Mac and Cheese" -- you know, opposites that go well together!
ok this is getting interesting.
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Hope you like the rest of it!
I saw what Cheese did there
I think pinkie would be a bit more considerate to Cheese once he saw that he was unhappy about the color change to his family recipe but that is just me :)
but I have to say the pun at the end made me smile, even if it was a bit cheesy.
How do you know so much about Rocks!?
still good :)
O///O
Well that was a cute story :) good work :D
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Thanks!
I spent three days writing the rock songs -- lots of Internet research to learn about the rocks!
Best,
Rhony
I ship it.
This, just by the virtue of being more than 90% correct grammatically, is better than half the fics out there. When I was told to read this fic I, to be honest, was expecting something less.
Good work. A bit cheesy, but well
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Thanks! I'm happy to take comments on any grammar mistakes!
Will there be a sequel? Please write a sequel! I can't live without a sequel! Okay, maybe I could, but this was a brilliant story. It would be really nice to see a sequel.
CRITIQUE
There are a lot of mistakes made in fanfiction and literacy in general, and info dumps are one of the worst offenders!
I don't mind exposition as long as it's handled carefully in a different format (dialogue, diary entry, flashback), but this takes up an enormous chunk of the first chapter and this story is already causing me pain!
The information being TOLD here is boring and unnecessary. It does nothing to drive the plot forward, or help Maud's character, instead we have to wait through this entire scene until these two characters meet for the first time. If this backstory has a purpose, why didn't you wait for Cheese and Maud to get comfortable with each other and TALK about it? It would have been more interesting there than it is here.
I'm still staying to see how these characters play off each other, but DON'T DO THIS AGAIN!
See, THIS should have been the first bit of the first chapter!
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I'm curious as to what you think of the rest of it.
That cheesy determination
pinkies need for pink greatly reminds me of her g3 personality
*crashes through the nearest window and slides from the momentum towards u*
HOLY FUCKING SHIT
okay, first off, this is the first good fic ive seen for these two. every other one either has a shit story, shit grammar, or both. but no, not this one. this is fucking amazing. u characterized them so well, u described maud's personality perfectly without making her some rock maniac, u made maud come out of her she'll but not be a terrible ooc mess, u made cheese a partying mess but still left in her child personality of being rather shy and described it perfectly with groups vs one on one, and u managed to write having a crush so perfectly from both ends, with blubbering love struck goof and in denial but slowly being like 'fuck it i wanna snuggle the nerd' without missing a single fucking beat. u put it amazing amounts of detail without making entire paragraphs dedicated to someone's eyes
overall this is fucking amazing and i plan to check out ur others works. fucKING BRAVO
Hooooo my~~
Not to sound like a pervert, but dammit you should have written what happened in that moment!
Rockology
ROCKOLOGY?!?!?!?
GEOLOGY
ROCKS
GEODES
SEDIMENTARIES
ROCKS MAN